Who should I choose???

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *madelinnicoledavis (01), Oct 16, 2012.

  1. I was getting ready for school. It was the first day so I dressed nice in a cute dress like most did for the first day. I ate my breakfast and told my mom by and then grabbed my stuff and started heading to school. I hear some footsteps behind me. I thought there's no way someone could be following me there Is not another family living here the house next door has been empty for months. I turned around and no one was there do I quickly turned back around thinking I was hearing things. I heard them again this time I didn't hesitate. I turned around as fast as I could and saw some blonde hair duck into some bushes. Right then I decided I would check it out. I looked Behind the bush and screamed ..........
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    Did y'all like it I'm hoping it will be a good story but I want to no if y'all think it is will update later today I'm really happy to write this and want to no wat y'all think before I move on with the story
     
  2. I don't know where it is going, but I really like it so far! Keep it up!
     
  3. Thanks trust me it will get interesting  just as a short start I think it was good
     
  4. I screamed there was a boy about my age sitting behind the bushes and he screamed right back as startled as I was.I helped him up and he said thanks. I say " no problem " and them realize he is cute and I should of said something smarter. He smiles and says " I'm just moved here in that house right there oh and by the way my name is Zevin" I said " wow I didn't think anyone was crazy enough to move there " and we Both bust out laughing. Then I say" my name is madelin but everyone calls me maddie" " I luv that name" he says and I start blushing and he said " what school do u go to". ( by the way there are two schools in my small town) I tell him and he says " no way! Me to!" an I smile and say "well if you want you can walk with me to school and I can show you around" he says " that would be amazing" with his blue eyes sparkling I start blushing and he says " come on I don't want to be late" and we laugh and walk to school talking a little as we walk.
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    can u believe it a guy hiding from a girl
    Please keep committing glad y'all like it so far also
     
  5. O by the way sorry fit the short updates thy seem longer when I write them
     
  6. On the way there I was still confused about something. I asked Zevin " why where you hiding from me??" he says " well ..... Ummmm...." I say " come on tell me " he says " fine I will but don't laugh!" I say " ok " an then he says " well I don't normally talk to people and I am really shy so I was hiding so that you couldn't see me and I wouldn't have to meet anyone until school started but I wasn't expecting you to try and find what was behind you!" he starts laughing and I say "well why did you talk to me if you don't like talking to people???" he goes" ummmm" and starts scratching his head and I knew he didn't want to tell me I say" it's ok if you don't want to tell me" he says" no I want it's just that it's .. Well.... Embarissing" I say " well you can tell am later if you want" " ok. Do u no where any of these classrooms" he says and hands me his schedule. I say " yea! They are the exact same ones I have" an we start laughing and the more we laugh the more I feel like he is staring at me and I start blushing. He says" what's wrong?" and I say" oh it's nothing " hiding my face. He says " ok I guess it's only fair since I hid why I talked to you but you will have to tell me sooner or later" and we Both start laughing and we walk in the school still laughing and immediately everyone stops and stares at us. Apperantly we shouldn't be laughing this early or they are surprised that there is a new guy and I am talking to him like we where old friends he says" come on we better get to class or else we are going to be stared at for the rest of the morning" we laugh and say" true true " and we start laughing all over again. Then that's when I noticed we where still holding hands from where I helped him up. That's when I thought maybe that's why people keep staring at us. Then I start blushing afraid that he would notice but luckily he didn't and we walked in class and waiting for the teacher to tell us where to sit. We where put right beside each other and we laughed about this until class started.
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    Hope y'all are still reading this if not this was all for nothing  keep committing and I will update soon
     
  7. I could hardly focus the whole entire class time. I could feel him staring at me and I was getting a little nervous. I tried to pay attention but as soon as I started writing down some notes I would end up staring at him instead. After like forever the bell wrang and I waited for Zevin and we headed to the next class. Then I saw someone. It was the guy that had a big crush on me. I always had to hide around him or else he would attack me with hugs saying he was just messing with me and that he didn't like me. So I told Zevin we needed to hurry. He asks why and I tell him and he says " well if he comes over I won't let him hurt you I promise" I said " thanks" and he says " no problrem " and I realize that was wat I said to him the first time we met and I started blushing at the memory. We walk in the next class and somehow got seated by each other again we laughed again. The day went on slowly and in all classes we sat by each other and I couldn't focus the whole time. We walk home. On the way home I fall over something in the road. He catches me and I blush do hard my face was burning. Then after a long while he helps me back to my feet. He took my hand and held on to it and I smiled. He smiled back and I was happy for the rest of the day. Then we where at our houses. I was sad I was having to leave him. I said " I'll see u tomorrow " and he says" defiantly " and lightly kisses me on the cheek. I am blushing really bad and he just smiles and walks off. I decided then that I was going to having to forget about the other guy I liked Lucas . Them I thought but Lucas moved and decided it was time I moved on.
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    I hope y'all liked this one this was an emotional part for me because this is what I hoped would happen with the real Zevin but it never did so I write on this instead. Tell me if u r enjoying and I will update soon
     
  8. new person in the story Lucas and let me explain he used to live where Zevin lives now
     
  9. Needs commas, pharagraphs, and spelling correction.
     
  10. I'll try but I was never food at English 
     
  11. The next day I was ready to get up and see Zevin. I was outside before I knew what had happened. Instead of seeing Zevin I was in shock and screamed. Lucas was outside waiting for me.
    He says" don't yell it's ok it's just me"
    I say" that's why I screamed"
    He says" well I see there's no heys or how you doings I see how it is "
    I say " it's not like that it's just....."
    Then Zevin comes out yelling" hey maddie wait up!"
    I yell back saying" ok"
    Then I turn back to Lucas and tell him he has to go
    He asks why
    I tell him he just has to
    Then he says " oh I get it now you want to be with your boyfriend "
    I amediantly say" he's not my boyfriend "
    He says" whatever " and leaves
    I turn to see Zevin getting close I turn and yell" hurry up slow poke" and we start laughing
    He asks me who was talking to me and so I tell him.
    He says " well that is a little weird of him coming to your house like that"
    I say " yea it was"
    Then he says out of nowhere " did you two date before he moved" and I was so embarrassed because the truth was we hadn't .
    I say " no why "
    He said" well the way he looks at you is the way you and me look at each other "
    I was lost what was he saying??
    I say" what do you mean"
    He says I guess you don't notice do you"
    I say " I guess not"
    He sighs then says " well you will soon when he is looking at you like that all day"
    I was still confused so all I could say was" o-ok"
    We walked to school in silence but the thing I noticed was he didn't hold my hand this time. Did I do something wrong?? I just decided to ignore if and keep walking and when we entered the school everyone dropped their bags and ran over to me asking about Lucas. I sighed. I knew right then the day was going to be a long one.
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    Hope u enjoyed keep committing my amazing fans and will update soon again 
     
  12. All day long I was asked about Lucas and all day long i was having to keep everyone away from me.even at lunch I couldn't have peace so I threw my lunch away and walked off. I ran into someone in the hallway. I say" sorry " and walk on before I no it someone's grabbed my arm and I try to break free but couldn't. I look up and see its Lucas. I yell at him to let me go and he just kept saying " not until you say hey to me" I screamed as loud as I could "HEY!!! Now let me go!!" I was so mad. Then all the sudden he let go and I turn around to see that Zevin has pushed him off of me. He notices me looking and says" are you alright" I say " yea I think so" and he says "come on he was shaking you really hard we need to get to the nurse" and then out of no where I fell and before it went black all I felt was his hands catching me and all I could here was him yelling for someone to help me.
    The next thing I knew was I was in a hospital I had no idea how I got there or why I was there when all of the sudden the memory flowed into my head. I looked out the window it was dark out and I looked beside me there was Zevin asleep. I guessed that he had fell asleep waiting for me to wake up. I am weak but I manage to throw something at him to get him up. He looks up and sees I'm awake. He says" wow you just woke up and your already grumpy " and we laughed . I ask him how long I was out he says" 48 hours " . I was in total shock. There was no way I was out that long I remember it like it was 10 minutes ago! I say " well how long have you been here?" he says" the whole time" and I am shocked that he would do that for me. Then I say" what time is it " he said" it doesn't matter just get some rest"and kisses my head. This relaxes me enough to where I can sleep and the next thing I knew i was home.
     
  13. Now do y'all like it  is it interesting 
     
  14. I got up and walked down stairs my mom was there talking to zevin. He sees me and says" your finally up! I thought you passed out again" and we started laughing. My mom was cooking something and I could smell it.
    I say " mom what are you cooking it smells amazing"
    She says bacon, eggs, and pancakes all of you favorites "
    I smiled and sat down in a chair at the table. I ask how I got home.
    Zevin said " your mom and I took you out of the hospital and put you in her car and we met back here and put you in your room"
    I said " oh we'll that explains why I'm here"
    Zevin Starts laughing. I eventually do to deciding it was a little stupid of me to say.
    Then mom says " here you go maddie " and hands me my plate. Apperantly they where eating and talkin the whole time I was asleep so I quickly ate and put my plate up. Then I went over and sat on the couch.
    " what's wrong" my mom asks
    " I'm cold and I also feel weak"I say.
    " she says well let me go get a blanket" and she walks off. Zevin comes and sits by me.
    He says" why do you feel weak?"
    I say" I don't know really it's just that I can't move as fast as I should be able to"
    He says" awwww it will be ok you just got to get some rest and sleep the pain off"
    I was about to protest when my mom comes in with the blanket and she tells me to get comfortable and try to relax. Eventually I did relax and fell asleep. This time I woke up on the couch like before. Then I start smiling I see Zevin asleep on the other couch from where he stayed with me all night. I eventually went back to sleep( again) and didn't wake up for hours.
     
  15. Alright ppl I will write agin tomorrow sometime 