I didn't know what would happen... But something really messed me up... On Auguest 18th I went surfing with my friends... It was nearing the "End Of Summer Surfer Competionton" and I excited as ever knew what needed to be done!! It was Shark Season... But they wouldn't want my skinny meatless body!! I trained for hours and hours... And got better and better! Night Of Competition- "Our last Competitor is... Miss Renae Vera!!" I sprung up and headed for the waves!! I could almost see the trophy in my hands.... But I knew I needed to focus... But that trophy!! It was 5ft and it was gold!! I have never won a compitition and I knew I had this in the bag!! My turn- I rode many waves and mastered many trick.. I flipped and spun!! Big Kahuna was beyond the Horizon pushes close to shore. The wind was harsh and it pelted me and the crowd with rain!! I couldn't see but I knew Big Kahuna was close!! I got on Big Kahuna and 20 seconds later I was under Big Kahuna
Update Under the waves- "Where am I" I was thinking to myself.. "And how am I breathing??" I touched my gills. I am breathing!! I must be dead!!! My legs start to form a tail! My Mermaid Life- I never knew my Mom but my Dad told me "she lives in the sea" but what I though he ment was she was in the military.... My life was now aquatic and that's how it's gonna be for ever
I swam around and didn't notice that once ur mermaid u become bigger.. And sharks would feast on them!! I quickly swam more out looking for clear passing.. I swam up and down and met up with a shark!! He was hungry and knew I'd be easy if I didn't move or swim away!
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That Same Night- I woke up in a coral reef... I couldn't tell if I was dreaming... But my wounds had been healed! It was like Magic!! "Oohhh" A merchild had appreaded at that very moment. "Who are you??" I looked around "Im Renae" and u?? "Im Damian" he laughed "Ur pretty!!" I smiled and got up "Let me take u to the kingdom!! At The Kingdom- The Mermaids swam around the bright town they stopped and started at Damain and I who were the same age.... I was different and was a stranger or maybe a threat to the town
The Queen- "Hello my child!! Welcome to Mermaidia!!" The queen's world blasted out. She was only 20 (in human years) and she was very pretty!! "Why are you here??" "I want to be human again" "Then go see Zacora!! The Merwitch"
Into Zacora's- "Where r we goin??" I asked to Damian who was 2ft ahead and swimming fast. "We only have 3 miles left!!" Damian said nonchalontly as he continued. "Only.." I said rolling my eyes. At Zacora's- "Welcome child" Zacora an elder mermaid exclaimed. "How may I help you my dear" Zacora sounded creepy but I was eager to be human again!