Tick-tock , tick-tock I awoke to the sound of my alarm on a chilly day.I put on my glasses and looked at the time, ugh,7:00 in the morning.Time to meet Ron Hermoine (sigh).When i got out of the Gryffindor Tower there were kids bustling in the corridors of Hogwarts.There were Ravenclaws ftaking their time
To get to the breakfast hall, Slytherins picking on first years on the way, Hufflepuffs talking about future examines, and the Griffindors hurrying not to be late.When i got to the hall, i heard a familiar voice calling," Oiy! Harry! Over here!"(Ugh,why does he have to start yelling so early in the morning!?) I stumbled over to where Hermoine and Ron were sitting, sat down ,and waited for The Sorting Hat to begin.The Sorting Hat has the job of putting kids into each group,so let's say you're cold heartless and vain,then the Hat would put you into Slytherins.But if you were adventurous and brave,you would be put into Gryffindors like me.And if you were intelligent and wise, you would be put in Ravenclaws.So if you were hardworking and loved a challenge, you would be put into Hufflepuffs. Thanks for reading walk me if u want an update or any changes. ;-)
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Everyone got seated and waited for headmaster Dumbledore. I looked around and got a bonk to the head."Harry! Wake up already,you need to set a good example to the first years!" ( Geez.Hermoine's my friend but sometimes she can be a pain in the ass.) I turned to the voice of an annoyed Hermoine. "Oh,soHermione
"Oh,sorry Hermoine.Didn't get enough sleep last night." But before she could answer back,Ron quickly shushed us,"You guys be quiet! Dumbledore is here!" THAT caught my attention,I quickly turned around and here walked in Dumbledore.