"Wake up Miley!" "wuhh," "Mum keeps coughing and her face has gone white!" Miley walked with her sister,Sam towards their mums room. The door was slightly open. Miley peeked through. Her mum laid there, no movement. Miley phoned the doctors but when they came, they told her to phone the ambulance. When the ambulance came, they said it was too late, She was dead. Sam cried so much, she lost 2pounds of weight. Life would be so hard. ------------------------------------------------------------------------- I was on holiday, I got bored so I wrote a story, but then I put my book down and it fell into the sea. Hope you enjoy this sad story it's the first sad one I wrote.
The next few weeks of school were missed, the girls stayed at their grandmothers house. It was very boring. Sam had a lot of fun playing with her peppa pig toys while Miley had to sit and watch 'crime and detective network' ----------------------------------------------------- 3WEEKS LATER ----------------------------------------------------- Mileys POV ----------------------------------------------------- Gosh, back at school. Sam gets to stay home as she's not in school yet, she's only 4. I walked into the school, thinking Jess still won't be there. Jess is the schools hottie, always has boys following her. I'm more of a normal person. Today, the schools hottie boy, Chase winked at me. I got scared because he is Jessica's boyfriend and she would kill me. Walking through the school, Jess bumped into me telling me to back off from Chase. I told her that I hate chase, but everyone had a crush on him. That day went slow. I was unusually silent at lunch, thinking of my mum. I am hoping that they can help her. If they don't, my life will tear appart even more....
I think it's a pretty good start. Remember to put tons of details in, like what the characters look like, what their surroundings look like, the weather, the time of day, etc. Take it slow; you're moving kind of fast, so it's easy to get lost in your writing.