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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *_Whateva_ (01), Sep 17, 2012.

  1. (I don't care that ppl I say I cab't post more things I'm just going to write Wat I want)
     
  2. Ya! She can't do what ever she wants! Oh btw hi
     
  3. Hi and u rock also
     
  4. Ik we do
     
  5. And can ppl help me with some stories follow me so we can share ideas
     
  6. If you want, I can give you criticism when you start writing, so you can improve your writing. Sorry I can't do a collab, but I'm looking forward to seeing your writing:)
     
  7. I'll help with ideas later and Angel gives out AMAZING criticism
     
  8. Aw, thank you
     
  9. Rough draft
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    I was walking down the hallway going to class I had my favorite class social studies. Everyone thinks I'm some dumb kid but they've never seen my grade.

    All A's and b's (C's here and there) I just act dumb because no one likes smart people.
    I got into class when I saw that Mr.Yellek wasn't here today but a new teacher was. He looked VERY strong I could see all the girls flirting with him because everyone knew he just graduated.

    I just sat there raising my hand to tell ppl stuff like the major Norse gods names and all that

    The teacher seemed to be glancing at me from time to time most ppl say I look amazing but I never believe them because I'm me and I look ugly.
     
  10. Time for criticizing
     
  11. Here's a big one! I hate it! It is the worst! I couldn't have hated it anymore! Hint hint: I hate SS but other than that.... AMAZING:)
     
  12. Did u lie about hating it and I'm taking the idea From a different Rp but the plot is different
     
  13. I hate SS, that what I was saying, but it's part of the story and I love the story lol
     
  14. Sorry I'm new at writing stories on this
     
  15. Should I continue? But I only see one person reading it so maybe I should drop it
     
  16. Guess no one cares.
     
  17. YEESH!!!! I was eating dinner!!!! Okay, here's my criticism: Remember punctuation, a few spots are missing it. And spell out the words, like people instead of ppl. But great start!! I like it!!
     
  18. Should I continue?