Thirst for blood or something bigger?

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by -PA_Veronica-, May 20, 2012.

  1. I looked into the mirror at my violet eyes, a tear slid down my cheek. I will never be normal, I was a monster. I washed the blood off my mouth from hunting. I put in my contacts to change my eyes to hazel, I grabbed my bag off my bed an raced out the door. I was heading to school, I was going to blend in and for once in my life try to be normal.

    I walked in the classroom full of delicious smelling humans, I shook the thought away I didn't need to feed I was fine. I sat down by a redhead, she smiled at me and I smiled back.

    "you new here? I've never seen you before," She asked.

    "yea, I just moved here with my dad this summer," I replied nodding.

    "Oh cool, I'm Savannah by the way and you are?"

    "Ebony,"

    "I love your name it's unique," she giggled.

    "thanks it was my mothers name," my heart burned at the thought of my mother, staked and burned to ashes by villagers in the 1400s.

    "That's nice Are your parents divorced?" she looked concerned.

    "Um no my mother died in a fire, a week after I was born," it was true she had saved me from death and a week later she was burned. I was forced to watch, too scared to do anything.

    "Oh I'm so sorry,"

    "It's fine," it wasn't but I didn't want her to feel bad. I liked her she was nice and I knee we would become best friends.

    The teacher walked in shifting everyone.

    "All right everyone I'm gonna call role now please settle down. Also get your summer energy out," he called the role for what seemed forever and then finally. "Ebony Evergreen..."

    "Here," I smiled feeling confident even though thousands of eyes were staring into me. I shook there stares away from me I was abnormally beautiful. My high cheek bones, fair skin, long hair the shade of milk chocolate, and my best feature my hazel eyes that shone like stars. This was gonna be a fun, I couldn't wait to meet the snotty popular girls every school has and show them the new chick in town
     
  2. Thanks you like it?
     
  3. It's awesome!  Everybody just makes new stories while I just say on Spiked tears  oh it's a slow process, everyone else gets comments while I just wait, such a slow process  My story is such lost somewhere lol but I love your story 
     
  4. Thx so much I love writing it's my passion
     
  5. I love this too! Update soon!
     
  6. I love this!!! U should check out my story Out For Love or For Blood? keep writing yours!
     
  7. Thanks and I did I love ur story too
     
  8. You've read it?
     
  9. Lol... Its the first story I've ever wrote so... I hope it turns out good!
     
  10. I liked it but u should have paragraphs and dialogues should be it's own paragraphs to make it look longer and easier to read like how I did it
     
  11. Lol it's in paragraphs in my notes but when I copied and pasted that's how it showed up so
     
  12. Type it on here and hit return to make ur Paragraphs u don't have to indent just double space.
     
  13. Lol... I can try... I just find it easier to write in in my notes cuz most of the time im writing I dont have wifi...
     
  14. Makes sense just fix it b4 u post it that's Wat I would do
     
  15. Ooooh lpve it 
     
  16. Need more readers
     
  17. That was good but really short