What happens if you and your friends are all able to stop time with a touch of hands? Isnt that Cool! Espacilly since your in middle school ^---just my intro if u think it sounds good tell and if u guys think it is ill go on
My first story every one! Hope you like it Got it all in my head BOOP BOOP BOOP BOOP BOOP Max POV Oh GOD! The first day of stupid middle school and im already sweating like its summer! I wonder if i should follow my three step plan 1.Ignore every one 2.Just keep walking 3.Dont and this is a big dont Dont talk to girls espacilly Gabbie Oh god even saying her name gets my heart beating even faster then ever As i walk in to dull normal homeroom, i look around and see my friend Alex and Ed. Yes! Atleast someone i know, i go sit down with them and wait for the bell as we exchange scheduals i see i have them both in none of my classes! *BEEP* The annoying bell rings and i go to art class Borring Then after that i go to gym and when all the guys change i step out and see a familer black wavy hair bouncing up in down in a jogging motion. I stand there with my mouth wide open "Shes...In...My...Gym...Class " Oh no oh no no no I start to run and think gym is where i sweat the most! And with her thats like a bathtub full of sweat! As joggin finishes i luckly dont break a sweat yet, but then comes the game dodgeball and guess whos on the oppiste side Jack the bully...
I knew jack since preschool an the result was 10 bloody noses from him So know i have to avoid flaming dodgeballs from the kids who evillll! So i end up not on gabbies team UGH i wish i dont have to get her out like i will get anyone out We start the game and i only and i mean barley hit two kids legs while jack is nailing everyone and gabbies being beautiful as always then it comes to me vs gabbie and jack. Now i know ill really get it his last victum always goes to the nurse. He gets the ball ready and fires I duck and crawl to another location missing ball after ball i get a ball and i throw missing him by a inch but while hes laughing i notice the ball bouncing off the wall and hitting him on the back. Did i really just get jack the bully out?!?!?!?! OH GOD i can deal with that problem later cuz now that means its mean and gabbie...
Gabbie POV Wow, Max looked cute when he was surprised. Now that he got rid of that cheating,skunkbag,jerk Jack that tried to ask me out, I can finally get out of this game. I really hope he dosent hit me hard. I hide my facr and wait for the ball to hit me,but after a few minutes, I open my eyes to see him in front of me with a ball in his hands. Max POV I whisper"hold out your arms" As she holds them out i carefully throw the ball so it lands in her arms. I walk away with a smile on my face and go change into my regular clothes for next period
Max POV So what if i got myself by a girl! Well that "game" made me on the list of the whos who and right now im the guy who got out by gabbie. You know i had no idea what i was doing, my heart said to get your self out. Well thanks alot heart. Now i better get something out of that. (Now come the part why this thing is called the time stoppers) After a few periods i noticed gabbie walking past my door in gym with jack following her. I asked the teacher and when i walked out made sure Ed and Alex were with me. We stopped at a corrner hearing them argue loudly. I sneaked up behind jack when he was grabbing her and tapped on his shouldars...
Jack POV I got my reputations by beating up a kid. It was bloody and grusume he didnt even fight back WIMP. When i pass by all the girls swoon over but this one girl gabbie didnt even, care what i did. She liked that max kid, i mean why him and not mwa! Like really hes just a nerd that has no muscle at all. I even bet his dick is smaller then his pinkie. Now hes not such a nerd after all, it all started when gabbie was out in the hallways....
Never use emoji in your stories. Never use emoji. Nevar. Always. ALWAYS. Punctuate and capitalize whenever needed, especially in dialogue. Lots of run-on sentences, and it needs grammar improvement. :|
Goldialocks was giving simple criticism and advice. If you can't handle tips from an experienced author in FF...... Well, you're not gonna last long here.