These kinds of advertisements in forums are too brief... Very small amount of detail about the club.
Well all this says is the club name, owner them asks to join... You have unlimited space to type here. Why not use it to tell us all about the club more? Why not tell us what makes the club so awesome we may or may not want to join? Why should we care who the owner is, it is in the advertisement, but why should that make any difference? I feel a club advertisement in forum should make me think... " woah thats cool, maybe I might want to join"