It was a great day. Birds flying around. But as usual my friend, Luca, stayed in an arcade with me. School holidays have just started. We ran into the arcade and played on our favorite games. A beautiful girl walked in and greeted me. I greeted her back. We played a game of Air Hockey and then sat down to chat. I asked her what school she was going to and she replied "Fretlun High." We talked and had a coffee. Then we watched a movie together. I never got her number. From that day forward I never saw her again. Until the end of the holidays. Aziz Stories coming from wild ideas
Just one problem. You've switched from present tense to past tense and back. That isn't exactly good with the flowing of the story. Otherwise it's a pretty good idea.
U write without feelings, emotions, and descriptions... For example A beautiful blond headed girl who seemed cute in my opinion walked into the small arcade, and then walked up to me wearing a cute yellow summer dress, came up to me saying hi with a small smile and giggling a little after. After we talked a little we played a couple games of air hockey with each other. In our little chat I found out what her name was beth and then later asked what school she was going to at the time, and she replied back telling me that she was currently going to 'Fretlun High' which apparently was a relatively small school by the way she made it sound. example
Oh. Well thanks. I tried to put as much description as I could. I will put description at the start and then I worry about the story. Btw I was tired at the time. Anyway I will put more description in the next part
Hadess. Wanna take over the next part. I can't seem to get a good start for the new part. Hey that rhymes!