I'm just going to label the stories I make with numbers since I'm too lazy to come up with a name. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Enya was fast asleep on the couch, using one of her hands for a pillow. She was on her side, with her back to the couch's own side as her hand that wasn't under her head hang off the edge. She was in a completely deep sleep. Suddenly the door opened slightly, a completely silent Yuki sneaking in as she held her phone. She turned it on and aimed the camera at Enya's gentle and relaxed face, before snapping a picture. Now don't think Yuki is a creeper or anything. She was dared to do this. No one had ever seen was Enya looked like when she was asleep. (Without being attacked) But just as she turned his back to Enya to leave as she was studying the picture, she was grabbed from behind, trapped in a person's arms. Her eyes widen, and she slowly turned around to see Enya glaring at her. "Delete it."
[quote="lurk" But just as she turned his back to Enya to leave as she was studying the picture, she was grabbed from behind, trapped in a person's arms.[/quote] That was good, the only thing I managed to find was the placement of his in the sentence rather than her. Proofreading on several different occasions could help as after a while, I find I go word blind and don't see any mistakes if I try proofreading after I finished writing. Other than that, awesome job!