Sean's Poem Page

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by S3AN_DA_BOMB, Feb 15, 2013.

  1. Hey all you readers! This is my first poem page that I have ever done so please tell me if I need to improve or just comment :D
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    Eternal Romance

    Without the Sun there is no morning,
    Without the Moon there is night
    I have searched for a beautiful women like you
    So I cant lose my sight of you

    Your hair resembles the night sky
    Though it has no stars
    You shine with your own brilliance
    Unaware of those who may disown ur beauty
    The jealous hearts of others dont slow you down
    But motivate your esteem to rise higher

    If I should die before I wake, and never again see your beauty
    The bond we share shall no seize
    For our love will forever stay eternal

    Im glad to have had to have a love
    To which what makes my heart dance
    Let us stay together and forever share
    Our Eternal Romance.
     
  2. I ORDER YOU TO POST ANOTHER!
     
  3. Lol ok I will soon but I want more comments before I continue
     
  4. Good idea. Derp.
     
  5. Yea so spread the word
     
  6. Wow, that's fucking amazing, wolf! Good job bro! -Fistbump-
     
  7. -fistbump- yea thnx kiddo
     
  8. You're welcome daddy Sean :3
     
  9. Ok im gonna be busy today so I may not post again until tonight
     
  10. I like it, just maybe type with full words. :3

    For example: 'ur' becomes 'your' or 'you're' etc. 'Im' becomes 'i'm'.

    But yeah, it's pretty good. 
     
  11. Ok thnx for the info
     
  12. Ok I will return later
     
  13. I am ready to write another poem but I need a topic