Preview My parents , friends , aquantences all dead . Basically for the past 4 years ive been alone except for my brother and sister , their the only ones with me. Also for the past 4 years all thats been going on is nothing theres talk of war. Oh hello there , My name is Arical. I am 13 years old. This place they take prisoners they call it Sanctuary. I tell you its not a santuary but a death house and a mess.
Yea well im writting as i think this is only the beginig on paper i can do better with nartive and fantasy but still kinda jumbled.
Its just how I am Dit I really cant help it unless im doin a coop story then Theres no way My jumblness can get the better of me
Chapter 1: Avion A blonde haired man , about the age of 22 or so I'd say , a great Palidin fighter , walks around and one day stumbles upon me. " Hello , Who R You ?" I say to him . " Im avion and you r ? " He replys. " Arical " I comment. " What brings you here , Arical ?" he comments. " oh nothing really I go where i want when I want with my brother and sister , since my oarents were killed by the Bloodhounds. You cant see them but when they attack scarlett abd red show up when they do , The killed my parents and my friends , Dead . Their mission is to kill anything in their path " I exclaimed. " Looks like you've been busy running from the bloodhounds...." he replys , and with that Avion is killed by a bloodhound and i barely got to know him. Scarlett and Red show and when its over all i Know is he's dead , been killed by a bloodhound.
Use descriptive term and language to describe in story so you won't have to tell me out of the story. :?
Chapter 2: John Out in the open I am now and I meet another person , but i cant quite make out his age. Looks ten or so if you ask me. " Hello , Who Are you ?" I ask him. " What ?" he replys. " WHO ARE YOU" I scream at him this time. " oh , Im John , Who are you ?" he replys. " I'm Arical , Where do you come from ?" I ask. " I come from.....I dont know where , Such a strange question you ask." he says back. A flash of scarlett , I kniw thats a Bloodhound but luckly my new friend here isn't killed. I can enjoy this much more than i did when I first met the Bloodhounds. Saying i can enjoy this its better than when i met Avion and they killed him right away. Where exactally was this Sanctuary and what was it used for , How would I get there ? There's so many questions to ask and so little answers, Where to begin , What do I ask first? All I know is that This is bugging me and I dont like it.
Whatever works i suppose. But your post confuses me, is John alive? Did he die? The lack of explanatory words and punctuation is throwing me off :/ I hate to say it.