So I'm 15 and my name is James Owens you may think I'm normal but Im not... I'm a runaway teen. I Ranaway because I of my parents divorce and my mom married someone else. No that I'm a runaway I can't go to school, eat hot meals, ect. So first I got to find me some water, a tent, 5 apples to plant and eat. I found all thouse resources to survive. I first planted the apples seeds, and eat a apple. Then I set up my tent, and lastly I drunk some water. It was now 8:00pm and I know it was going to be hard sleeping on the ground. It was very uncomtrable but I manged to get thourgh the night.
Here are some suggestions to improve your writing: Use paragraphs Add detail Slow down the story -- it's moving very fast -- and add suspense Try to vary the start of the sentences (don't start every one with "I") Vary the sentence structures itself (don't make every sentence or no sentences have a comma; space it evenly) Add dialogue Don't introduce the main character in the very beginning, especially if it's written in first person, and don't use etc. -- they sound unprofessional Tons of spelling/grammar/capitalization mistakes (proofread!) The tense switches from past to present -- keep it at one tense unless you're talking about the past Any single digit number is supposed to be spelled out, and the number isn't supposed to be used (5 should be five) I know it's a big list, but some of the stuff is just very small stuff. Keep writing! That's the only way you'll get better.
Also, the plot doesn't seem very original so far. Maybe add a twist or something to make it more unique/interesting.
I agree with Angel.. And to me, when you describe what you did that day (when you got food and stuff).. It just sounds like you have just bullet pointed it. You need to describe how you got and where you found it.. Hope this helps️️