Reality: Good or Bad??

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *hiUrock (02), Jul 2, 2012.

  1. Hi my first story on here, so tell me if I good or bad. But read it first

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    Before it happened:
    I remember that I was sleeping in the back of the car with my little sister, Anne.
    She was beautiful, she was only 11 years old when the violence started. Poor little girl, she had to give up her friends and family, except me. Everyone was either dead, alive, or a zombie. She had our mothers eyes, beautiful, aqua blue eyes. She had blonde, long hair, she got it from our grandmother.
    She looked like an angel compared to me. I had short, straight black hair and crappy, green eyes. Grandma used to say that ment strong at muscules, but weak at heart. Then, she said, "Ross, remember to sacrific the thing you want most, and earn the one thing you desire."
    I was strong and tan, Anne was pale and weak. I was tall and normal looking, Anne was short and stunning. I played sports and broke things, and she play dolls and was delicate with things. I would go outside and workout, and she would stay inside and bake cookies, which were wonderful and they always melted in your mouth once u closed your mouth. We were the complete oposite, and yet we had the same parents.

    Choose one:
    A: Car crash
    B: Parents die
    C: Fight
    (Sorry they are bad ones, but later they will get better so keep reading!!!)
     
  2. I forgot one!!!

    Choose another one:
    D: All of above
     
  3. Something will happen that WASN'T in to choose one!!

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    Day #1. We were in the car with my parents and it happened. We were driving to my basketball game. It was me and my little sister, Anne in the back siting on the oposite side of me. Even though we were a completely different, we had a lot to talk about! My father was driving and my mother was looking out the window and closing her eyes. She had a massive headache and got really sick. It was terrible! She would look straight at us and it looked like she hasn't slept for days, she would start screaming for something to get out of her. And she would trip and fall like she hadn't walkin in weeks.
    We took her to the hospital and they would say she was healthy and just needed sleep. We forces her to sleep for a full day and still nothing would have happened.
    We were at a stop light and she started to mumble,"Move you-... move your gonna... were gonna.... die."
    Then out of no where this car comes dashing towards us like the person driving didn't know what they were doing. They slammed right into the front of our car, my dad got hit in the head with some kind of knife. "DAD!" I screamed. Blood was dripping from his head. I started to shead a tear. Mom was too weak to get up and dad was... was, dead. I scream at Anne to get out, but she wouldn't go with out me.
    I tried to pull off her seatbelt, but it wouldn't budge. I hugged them and mom whispered into my ear, "Zom..." I didn't hear her, "What?"
    "Zomb.."
    "What?"
    Then she screamed, "ZOMBIE!" and pointed to a weak man getting out of his car. He looked like my mom except for younger and more manly. He sprinted to my sister.
    "Run, Anne!" I screamed at her. But she was paralysed. I ran to her and punched him in the face. He just punched back like it was nothing. He started grabbing my arm and biting it. It hurt like hell, I could feel his sharp teeth plunging into my skin. "AHHHH!" I screamed. I kicked him in the balls and he went to his knees.
    I was like, yea I'm a bad a$$, but then he started biting my leg! "SH*T!" I felt toxic acid running throw my veins. I knew I was about to die. I just hoped Anne was far gone from here. I looked back, she was right there with a knife from the car and walking towards me.
    She was walking closer, but she didn't do anything. I started to grow weak with him still biting my leg. I said, Anne, I... I need you," I was growing really weak. "I need you to give me the knife." I started to fall back and get tired, I couldn't see. It was so blurry, I couldnt breathe. Then I heard the car door open and close.
    "AHHHH!"

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    Sorry nothing for you to choose, but there will next time. I hope I surprised you when u were reading this hope you like and keep reading...
     
  4. BUMP I LOVE IT
     
  5. Really? Thank you
     
  6. Nice. I like choose ur own adventure type stories and think this thread could go far! Update!
     
  7. It's rocks so far
     
  8. Thx I almost had a heart attack when u said that!!!!! Thank you do much!!
     
  9. Please! I need more poeple to read it and then I will move on And continue!!!
     
  10. Update!!
     
  11. Hey remember me? Haha it's so good girl!!  ~Bump update soon!
     
  12. MOAR UPDATE IT!!! I'LL ADVERTISE IT
     
  13. Sorry, y'all I made this earlier, but it wouldnt send so I had to write it all over again and I hope you like it

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    "AHHHH!"
    I had no strength, I couldn't move or see. It was like I was just in a comma or something.
    I fell all the way down on my back and was looking up at the sky. It was a beautiful night blue. And no stupid clouds to ruin its beauty.
    I used all my strength to turn my head to see the commotion. All the pain was in my arm, leg, and heart, but mostly my leg where the zombie mostly bit me.
    I saw my mother beating the stupid a$$ zombie with a big, wooden stick. When the zombie was down she picked up a huge rock.
    I wondered where she got all that strength. About two minutes ago she couldn't move her little pale arm, but now she's on her feet picking up a rock that locked heavier then herself.
    She got the heavy big gray rock and lifted it all the way up higher than her head and throw it at the zombie with all her might. The blood splattered all over the place. The blood splated all over my wolf jacket for my basket ball today. Looks like i was gonna miss that game. My poor little sister, Anne had to see that, 'poor little girl' I thought.
    Then it seemed like mom lost all her strength when she was walking toward me. She fell on her knees, but she didn't give up. My mom was strong like that, even though she was petite, she was still strong. She crawled to me and looked at my arm and leg.
    "It's ok, I'll be fine,"I lied. She knew I was gonna die, she started to cry.
    "No!" She screamed at me and she put her teeth where the zombie put his and sucked the acid out of me and drank it.
    That pain was fcking a b*tch. I felt like someone was sucking the pain out, but giving me more tiredness. I started to doze off, but mom wouldnt let me. She slapped me as hard as she could and I was extremely awake then. I could feel my check growing red.
    I turned to my little sister and saw her closing her eyes. She always does that when she knows something bad is happening and she can't handle it, so she closes her eyes. She always does that: when we watch scary movies together, when I fell and broke my arm playing basket ball, and even when she's alone in the dark.
    When mom was done with my arm she when to my leg. And I though my arm was painful, but this one was four million times painful than just my arm. I have felt pain before, but not this much!
    I started squeezing a medium rock nearby. But then I looked at my sister and she wasn't closing her eyes she was walking towards me. She sat down next to me and picked up my head. She used her legs to make me a pillow. I looked into her sweet blue eyes. Full of water and suddenly I didn't feel pain at all and I dropped the rock. Looking into her eyes filled with water made me feel like I was relaxing on a beach.
    I looked at my mom already done sucking my blood and passed out. It was and only matter of time before she became a zombie I thought. I looked at her closely, I saw she had the knife plunged into her own self. Blood was falling from her. She killed herself, so she wouldn't come back into a zombie and kill us.
    I started to cry and so did Anne. I had to stay strong and be the man here. Even though I was nineteen, I was the only man left in the family.
    "We need to burry them. Right here, right now." I told my sister. She helped me up and helped my walk. I was still wounded.
    We saw a shop, it was a gun shop. Out of all the stores why did it have to be a gun shop. We walked in and it was empty. By that I mean no one was there, it was just guns. I sat down on the ground. I needed a brake, we walked to much.
    I thought Anne was gonna be tired to carrying me here, but she was full of energy and looked around. I looked up at the glass table full of guns and saw something red. I felt it and it was smoshy and wet. It was.... blood.
    "Anne?" I asked the air. "Anne where are you?"
    If there was a zombie and she was alone. She would be dead meat, I broke the glass and pulled out a gun and pressed it against me. I walked to the back. "Anne?" I asked the air again. I walked into the back room and so surprised at what I saw I gasped. I saw.....

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    Hope you keep reading!!! It was amazing to write this story and I hope you felt like you were there with them because I did haha.

    Time for you to choose:
    A: Ross (main character) gets a crush
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    B: Anne (little sister) gets a crush
    C: Something you won't see coming
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  14. Sorry, the stupid thing wouldnt let me do paragraphs or what ever, and I didn't feel like writing it again I guess I just lazy!! Haha
     
  15. Also, sorry for the crushes for the choices, I like to make it crazy!! Haha, I wanta keep you reading:)