Here's a rap I'm working on, Pls give feedback below, it's made to go with a certain beat, so the flow is a little off without it, anyways just give me feedback and constructive criticism Intro: the world is fucked up at times, it's cross globe problems, I just don't know why Verse 1: World problems seem un-solvable, yet evolvable, let's resolve it all, world problems here and there, kinda like truth or dare, scattered round the globe, trying to fix the problems within the dome, world hunger, falling structure, violence, no tolerance, drinking and driving, just enough money for surviving, critics criticizing, dreams broken, blood tooken, bullets flying, families crying, the continues lying, this world is unsatisfying, let's work together and stop denying, we can either work as one or none, after a while the whole world can have fun Chorus: It takes effort for accomplishment It's better then a supplement So try hard to fix corruption Before the guns blazing cause eruption Yeah, People jumped on the daily Bitches drinking to much Bailey Em thinking bout hailey All wepons of destruction Thousand ways of corruption I'm done listing I'm just hope people r listening Cause the pope is missing The hope of all good gone Let all cope with hood con Say bye to comic con Cause that shits long gone Gonna be gone soon If people don't start respecting earth like moon People r acting like everyone is a goon Corruption is no baboon Earth is like the sphere of doom Soon gonna have corrupt government Weed to coke, evolving the supplement The world is not joke, People soon to be aiding on a toke, smoking in front of there own folk, this world is evolving, the economy dissolving, Chorus: It takes effort for accomplishment It's better then a supplement So try hard to fix corruption Before the guns blazing cause eruption Corruption is unstoppable But yet nothings impossible Y does it still go on When it should be long gone Who knows, but how do we stop it? I don't think we can Cause it's like a chevy van Mass produced by the mills The victims loseing the bill
Good job shiny I'm a rapper too,so I could feel the flow of the beat.look on my wall for directions to my bat cave,I'm silenced on here,in the event u need any more feedback from someone that does music as well
That's asking for personal information, and if I answer I'll get silenced to, so i ain't down for that