Hey, thanks for looking at this. I hope you enjoy reading it, I would appreciate any type of critics or reviews that you may have. Project E.S.G the final project to be forward to government and the C.S.I, lost to the underground world on 25/6/98. No traces were found. Suspect to be one of Elliot Huges a new player to the underground no data on him, no criminal record. Report handed in on the 1/7/99. Simone Reeve last report. Died two days after, age 29, reason unknown. ‘’Boss I found this report on your desk and I was very intrigued.’’ The Boss looked hard at the report it was from twelve years ago. The unsolved case that could rock our organisation. ‘’Mindi why did you look at this.’’ He stared at me with cruel eyes that would make anyone feel like the committed murder. His voice brutal but I wasn’t going to let that deter me from my goal. “The project was from years ago.’’ He added. ‘’I know, but is there any other information on this.’’ My eyes started to strain as all my focus went upon The Boss. ‘’Only that, the only one who did couldn’t tell and died under suspicious circumstances.’’ ‘’My uncle.’’ Fists clenched at the memory of my deceased family member. “Yes. I believe that was a year after your sister disappeared only born a few months before. Must have been a hard time for you.’’ He tried to give me a sympathetic look but only managed a glimmer of sincerity in his eyes. Nodding, my eyes kept glancing to the report on the wooded desk, all the answers gone but the case not forgotten. ‘’Boss may I take this case on?’’ This opportunity cannot be missed, that thought hit me like a ton of bricks. I will solve this case. He looked at me with his eyes looking straight into mine. ‘’You sure you want to take this on, you’ll have to take it up with the other members of the board, then file an official report plus if this doesn’t go well you have the possibility of being fired.’’ My determination wouldn’t let me get fired I’ve been working here for five years now but there was no way I could let this go. We shook hands and it was settled.
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Log Update 1: Who are they? There it was, my project almost complete just one more year and I would've reached my goal. The laws of science broken and all thanks to me. File opened 25/6/10 Yuki Down Age: 11 Personality: Is a tomboy, enjoys soccer but has an attitude. Plays with friendship. Living: In a high rise suburb in the south, has a mother, father and two older brothers. Class: 6-C Ability: Controls the emotions of other people. Goal: Emily wants to cherish more than anything the memory of her dying brother through whatever means is necessary and that means being chosen for the girl’s top national team. Renae Cultic Age: 12 Personality: Loving but has very little concept of other people besides her own, does her own thing (independent). Living: With a fortunate family, wealthy and has a younger brother on the west side. Class: 6-C Ability: Manipulate objects. Goal: Renae wants to keep their fortune that her family has by inheriting her father’s business, unfortunately she’s lacking in grades. Cole Noah Age: 12 Personality: Fun, over the top, but gets emotional easily. Living: With a laid back, protective family with a mother, father and an older sister. Class: 6-D. Ability: Memory control. Goal: Needing to go on her own journey of life choose the path of a delinquent. All she ever wanted was a friendship. Lillian Serosae Age: 11 Personality: Outgoing confident but can get cocky at times. Living: In a traditional family, very religious and has a mother, father and an older brother. Class: 6-C. Ability: Changes weather towards her mood. Goal: Lillian wants to patch up the relationship with her mother after shoplifting. Miya Rose Age: 12 Personality: Social, smart but indecisive. Living: Has a well off, hardworking family. With a mother and a younger and older sister. Class: 6-A. Ability: Magician. Goal: Wants to become stronger emotionally always relying on Annabelle is not the way she wants to live. She also wants to be there for her friend. Annabelle Kindeling Age: 12 Personality: Uses logic, determined but let’s anger control her. Living: A busy family but very caring. She has a mother, father a little brother and older sister. Class: 6-A. Ability: Can slow or speed up time. Goal: She wants to be able to express what is going on inside her head. The six beings that will control the world at my side. ___________________________________________ Sorry, this chapter was mainly personality profiles. The next chapter will have more of the story in it.
Log Update 2: First Day Back. Tesishone Middle School Classroom 6-C Yuki’s Feelings Our teacher walked in like the holidays haven’t even happened and gave as an assignment right of the back, we had to go into partners for it but my luck struck out and I got paired with this Renae girl. You would say is not the smartest, well not even that she was the dumbest at school. Most don’t really care though because they feel sorry for her since she is so sweet but I can tell you I’m not buying that. Something’s up. At least one thing came out of it alright; I’m sitting next to Lillian again. We’ve been friends ever since she transferred to this school which was about three years ago. During lunch Lillian and I went to grab some food from the café at school but it was closed, the chef for the café must have been too busy over school holidays so Lillian and I walked around starving. Suddenly Renae walked up to us and asked if we wanted to have lunch because her mother always packed too much. It was so fun taking advantage of her but it was only once. Lillian’s Thoughts One of the reasons Yuki and I get along so well is that we have the same mind plus things always turn out a hell lot better than they would with anyone else now I’m getting free food from that chick Cultic. After school I got stuck with after school clean up but with Yuki, we always seem to end up together. ‘’Hey Yuki, was that Cultic girl as dumb as they say.’’ ‘’Lillian that’s a bit cruel but she was and she hardly did any work. She basically just sat there staring at the assignment sheet.’’ ‘’Really, that sucks but at least she’s gone now plus she gave us food so she was a bit helpful.’’ We had a huge laugh after that but stoped when we heard footsteps but we looked outside the classroom and didn’t see anything so we started heading home. Cole’s Opinion Class 6-D After clean-up was done I was finally ready to go home and relax when I heard two girls from 6-Cs classroom so I listened in on the conversation, with the rumours going round it sounded like they were talking about Renae. Now I’ve only talked to the chick a couple of times but she had been really funny and fun but it seemed like they were talking about all the negative stuff about her. That is so not right if you don’t like a person you shouldn’t even think of manipulating her feelings like that. Poor Renae.
It's great! Very interesting, I can't wait to see more of this. It's great how you put yourself in each characters place and portray their thoughts!
In the character bio's in Yuki's bio you said Emily, was that a typo? Otherwise, this is great! Ill be checking in daily for updates.
It was defiantly a strange typo. Thank you for reading, I'll try to updated daily for a bit then see how often I can come up with ideas.
Ok so there were typos but thats expexted. I like how u decided to dive right in no lil back story to present just boom right in the kisser. uhhh i feel i the story line flows well n characters have their own feel. i feel it needs more scenery, more description of the suroundings the people the mood. u no set my mind right there inside the character make me feel like i amm this person in this book or at least make me ferl as tho im as close as the words im reading. Its good tho i like n looking forward to wats next for sure
Seriously, from the bottom of my heart. Thank you to everyone who is reading. I will try my best to make is as great a story as I can Inspired.
Log Updated 3: Failing This Case At The First Step, Not Going To Happen! Meeting Room 26/6/10 My papers were all ready to investigate know all I had to do was for the board to accept this case, well here goes. The room I entered was dark; the only source of light was small and dull. The board members all sat around a grey circular table as the leader, I’m guessing gestured me to hand over my papers. The papers were handed up to the board; too many for me to count as some flowed out of the black folder. They looked at it with the best poker faces you would have ever seen. They looked up at me and gave me the verdict there voices as cold as stone. ‘’You may investigate this case but only if you comply with these conditions.’’ ‘’Yes board members.’’ Please be easy conditions I wished for over and over in my head. ‘’You must find one other agent to join your case and give us a full report of everything you found out each day. If you must do any undercover work it must be done through our links.’’ My body bowed as I left the cold, dreary office. The only problem I had with the conditions, who in their right mind would take this case, especially with the chance they could get fired. Oh Geez. After the nerve racking meeting my heart filled relief as I walked into the warm embrace of the brightly lit, white break room. As I glanced over at the red vending machine on the back wall a confused look feel upon my face. Kenji was there looking frustrated at the machine as he ruffled with his shaggy, long, black hair. Noticing someone behind him he slowly turned, his green eyes looking down upon my brown eyes. ‘’Hey Mindi we’re all out of Coke that sucks.’’ I smiled towards him he can he can take work seriously but nothing else; he began working at this organisation the same time as me plus we we’re childhood friends so he was always my safe haven from the rest of the dull personality co-workers at this place. ‘’Kenji is that all you care about.’’ I said trying not to giggle. ‘’Oh Mindi you don’t get it.” He sighed. “By the way heard you took up the Elliot Huges case, one question, what in the hell were you thinking.’’ ‘’Kenji I took up the case for my reasons alright.’’ ‘’My bad didn’t mean to come off mean or anything.’’ He tried to look apologetic but i knew he wasn’t trying to be mean. ‘’I know it’s just it’s a big one on top of that I need to find a partner for this case but there’s a huge chance of getting fired.’’ He looked up at me like I missed the most important thing. ‘’Why don’t I be your partner besides I don’t really care about getting fired I got another job backed up.’’ He sighed giving me a look that he thought it was obvious. ‘’Amazing Kenji but anyway let’s get started.’’ My eyes widened in excitement, my goal, my best friend, my own mystery just starting. ‘’Were do we start.’’ He asked wrapping his arm around my neck. ‘’In the underground of course. I’ve already looked over all the pieces of evidence and found Elliot’s last known address.’’ ‘’How exactly?’’ ‘’From Steph of course.’’ His eyes grew ten times bigger with the shock. ‘’Her! Fine but let’s get some Coke first.’’ Recovering fast from the shock he put a big, goofy grin on his face.