Hey I asked Glinda the good. She said notting but she was talking to the other ozs people. But I need to know more about the green girl because am her sister and I never knew my sister because I was always in her shadow, I put my purple hand on Glinda and yelled. I would like to know more about the green girl!!! Then Glinda looked at me with her face looking sad, why would you want to know about someone that tried to kill a child. I said "because she is my sister and I never knew her". Glinda came to take my hood off and she looked at me in shock and started crying. I asked her what was wrong and she said I reminded her of the green girl. Her best friend her only best friend that shared story's of love together. More to come
Part two Glinda, came to me and asked if I was alright I was even thou she cut me off. I said yes mrs. Glinda I will be alright she turned to me and said that she was best friends with my sister and she wanted to see her again I said to her so do I but we can't bring her back. Then I heard my sister even thought I didn't know where she was I followed the voice all the way to her the green girl I never would of said that she was ok but see seemed to hate me. I seen her in pictures at the Oz duch but had no idea what she would look like.
Aren't you just retelling the story of "Wicked" pretty much? Like Fallen Angel said, use paragraphs for organization.
I think it would be interesting like this, but maybe you could add a twist or something so the story is more original. If you want. ^.^
A few days later I heard Glinda talk about my sister and how she was the best friend in all of OZ I really didnt think that she was all that fun. She was my sister and all am purple she green I mean what can I do? Then when school let out I was going to the new land, daddy had bought with the money that we had. I was to live there on my own no one to talk to or befriend. I'm so alone in this world of Oz. Then when it came to be my sister was died I heard her scream and I ran to find her. There was my older sister the green girl and Glinda the good they got in a fight that changed my point of view on them.
Glinda was here. She wanted to talk to me about my sister and how long I have known she had powers. I said "when we where little and she found out that if she got mad her powers where in her." I didn't understand why she wanted this but it makes me sad thinking about my sisters or talking about them and I never really knew them. Well because they study well I didn't like to study but it was ok. Then it hit me I may have powers but how would I know that. Some parts are hard to know I can't think if powers are my weak point or what. Oh we'll it doesn't matter now.
Soon, I asked my self. That's when you get to meet her. I was so scared to see my sister the green girl I never got to see her when she turned wicked. Glinda came to me and asked if I was ok and I said I was fine just scared. Then I was in the dark forest looking for my sister knowing not if she was died or alive. So I sang a song like my favorite song. Then I heard some thing like a person calling my name. I was so scared I didn't know what to do. So then it was passed ten in the morning I was so sleepy I laid down on the ground and fell asleep. I was awake in a house that I had never seen before. You a person called out what are you doing here. I looked for the person and found her she was green just like my sister.
She walked to the winter woods, boy it's cold here oh but I am still going to find my sister. I missed talking to people who didn't care that I was a wired color. But still people talk about me, I got bullied when I was younger its all apart from life. The woods had this monkey that looked like the one that Glinda had in her dorm that I lived in. I just wanted to see if it was, so there was a house the little girl came back! She going to kill me just because am purple! Help me I screamed, there was no one there. So I laid on the ground crying, then the monkey laid on top on me. So I just said to get up and then Glinda found me, she asked how I I was doing!
Then I found her, my sister I walked for days which seem like years. It was a slow Day someone in the back yelled but I will be here for lunch. Then the girl yelled back ok I hope you do better this time. I ran to the house I know that sound it was my sister Elphaba. She looked really green and she told me to sit with her. Then on the rock, there was a little girl she looked like Elphaba but more like me, I didn't know you had a child Elphaba and she said you know my name? Yes I said because your my sister I seen your picture in daddy's office. I started to cry, then she looked at me. Are you ok? What is your name? And I told her my name , is Mary. I lived in with Glinda when I was at shiz, I told her Glinda miss her. So does her flying monkeys, I kept this to myself and asked what is for lunch am hungry.