Perfection

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *Lilly555 (01), Aug 14, 2011.

  1. I'm new at this, so tell me what u think!

    Thanks!!<3
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    This is the story of how my life went from my version of perfect to hell in one day. It all started when my friend, Jack, asked me to go on a hike with him, and of course, I said yes. No one knew, but I'd had a huge crush on Jack for over three years now. I kept thinking about this as we went up the mountain together. We walked to a little creek that we had found together 10 years ago. It was as beautiful and peaceful as always. Then, when I turned to look at Jack I saw that he was looking at me.
    "What?", I asked
     
  2. "You look amazing", he said
    I smiled and blushed. I didnt know what else to do. Then we walked up to a cliff where we could look down at the town. Suddenly, I felt someone grab me, and I screamed. Jack started laughing.
    "Don't scare me like that!!", I said
    He hugged me and looked at me with his big blue eyes and said,"I would never hurt you"
    "I know", I said quietly wishing that moment could last forever. Then we just sat there on the edge of the cliff together for a few minutes.

    We eventually got up. So, there I was, wondering if my life could get any better, then I fell. I tried to grab Jack's hand but I couldn't grab it in time. I eventually hit the side of the cliff after what seemed like a million years. The strangest part was that I couldn't feel anything as I rolled down the side of the cliff. Then I stopped rolling, I couldn't see anything but I knew I was at the bottom of the mountain. I wondered if I was dead, but then I heard footsteps.
     
  3. I love it! Keep going please. 
     
  4. I need a few more characters so I'm gonna put up a sign up thing. Plz sign up!! Thanks 
     
  5. Great story!! Very unique intro:)
     
  6. Cam Rider
    5'2" 13
    Long brown hair with natural highlights, tan
    Normally wears tanks, cargo shorts, and converse.
    Is a rock climber, so rough hands.
    Got into a climbing accident, so there is a long scar going down her right arm.
    Won't take anything from anyone, is willing to hurt someone if they tick her off too much.
    Courageous, Daring, and Sly.
     
  7. I probably won't be writing for a week or 2 cuz I'm on vacation. But, I will update asap!! Thanks for all your support so far!! <3
     
  8. That's fine!! Bump
     
  9. I just got Internet connection so BUMP and I will update as soon as I get back from vacation
     
  10. I'm back from vacation and I'm going to post my update in a minute!!
     
  11. Yay, more story!
     
  12. I had a feeling it was Jack when I heard him calling my name.
    "Grace! Say something!", said Jack
    I tried to say something but I couldn't. So I tried to move my fingers, it hurt like hell, but I wanted him to know that I was ok. I eventually moved my fingers and I guess Jack saw them because I heard him gasp then I heard him dial some stuff into his phone, but after that everything went black.

    I woke up in the hospital and saw Jack sleeping in the chair next to my hospital bed. I tried to poke him or nudge his arm to wake him up but I still couldn't move my arm. I decided that I should let him sleep anyways. I still couldn't move anything, so I looked down and I was shocked by what I saw. I had broken both legs, my right arm, and my whole body was cut up by rocks that I had hit while I rolled down the mountain. As I looked at my once beautiful body I almost started to cry.
    Then a doctor came in and screamed,"She's awake!! She's awake!!!"
    "Shhhh!! Your going to wake up Jack!", I said, shocked that I could talk again
    Then the doctor yelled,"And she can talk! It's a miracle!!"
    I was right, he woke up Jack. Jack looked at me and said,"I'm so sorry"
    "Why are you sorry??", I asked
    "For letting you fall", he said
    "That wasn't your fault.", I said
    "I promised I would never let u get hurt", said Jack
    "No", I said "You said that you would never hurt me"
    He kissed my cheek and said,"I'll be right back. I'm going to get some food, do u want anything?" I told him that I wasn't hungry, so he left. Then my mom came in and started to cry with happiness when she saw that I was awake. I told her not to worry about me. I hate it when people feel bad for me, and when people are worried about me.
     
  13. Aww  i love jack he is so sweet
     
  14. Ya, and he is based off a guy I know in real life 
     
  15. I think I have enough time to write one more update tonight.