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Kitty was a sixteen year old girl living in the city. She lost her parents two years ago to a vampire killing them. She left the small town she grew up in trying to forget about it but she never can forget them. She was waiting in the middle of the city for her friend Kara. She began thinking of her mother and how she looks like her mom when she was sixteen. She missed her mom a lot an wished she wasn't killed. As she was deep in thought, a guy brushed past her and walked into the alleyway about a block away. She followed him with curiosity and when she was about to walk into the alley she noticed his bright blue eyes and amazingly shiny black hair. She wanted to walk up to him and ask him what his name was. She was about to when she heard her name being called behind her and she turned around to see who it was. "Kitty! Hey Kitty! What are you doing over here?" It was Kara. She was Kitty's best friend. She was really Kitty's only real friend. She had her bright strawberry blond hair and her wonderful green eyes. "Hey Kara. I was just looking for someone I thought I knew. Sorry. I should have stayed where I was" "It's alright. Lets just go to the mall already!" "Yeah. I guess we should get going." "Yeah! I'm ready to pick out my prom dress! I can't wait for Eric to see how amazing I will look! My dress will be perfect!" Kitty laughed at Kara. Kara was always talkig about her wonderful boyfriend Eric. She thinks he is perfect. She keeps nagging Kitty about yer needing to get a boyfriend and to not go to the prom alone when Kitty really didn't care. Kitty really didn't want a boyfriend. She still couldn't trust a guy. She went with Kara to get prom dresses. The thought of the mysterious guy was still lingering in Kitty's mind all afternoon and even in the morning when she went to school. She got a big shock at who she saw in the seat right next to hers in her first period.
Kitty was a sixteen year old girl living in the city. She lost her parents two years ago to a vampire killing them. She left the small town she grew up in trying to forget about it but she never can forget them. She was waiting in the middle of the city for her friend Kara. She began thinking of her mother and how she looks like her mom when she was sixteen. She missed her mom a lot an wished she wasn't killed. As she was deep in thought, a guy brushed past her and walked into the alleyway about a block away. She followed him with curiosity and when she was about to walk into the alley she noticed his bright blue eyes and amazingly shiny black hair. She wanted to walk up to him and ask him what his name was. She was about to when she heard her name being called behind her and she turned around to see who it was. "Kitty! Hey Kitty! What are you doing over here?" It was Kara. She was Kitty's best friend. She was really Kitty's only real friend. She had her bright strawberry blond hair and her wonderful green eyes. "Hey Kara. I was just looking for someone I thought I knew. Sorry. I should have stayed where I was" "It's alright. Lets just go to the mall already!" "Yeah. I guess we should get going." "Yeah! I'm ready to pick out my prom dress! I can't wait for Eric to see how amazing I will look! My dress will be perfect!" Kitty laughed at Kara. Kara was always talkig about her wonderful boyfriend Eric. She thinks he is perfect. She keeps nagging Kitty about yer needing to get a boyfriend and to not go to the prom alone when Kitty really didn't care. Kitty really didn't want a boyfriend. She still couldn't trust a guy. She went with Kara to get prom dresses. The thought of the mysterious guy was still lingering in Kitty's mind all afternoon and even in the morning when she went to school. She got a big shock at who she saw in the seat right next to hers in her first period.
Wow thats good vampgirl but wat was prom like who was the guy make it longer or do a follow up i want to know
Lol it hasn't gotten to prom yet... I'll let y'all know when I update it... And who the guy is will come up when I update next ;3
I am a BIG book reader. So I think it needs WAY more details. It can get very boring easily. Especially for ppl who dnt lik to read. So if u add more details u shuld be on ur way.
I am working on it... This is just a start... It's truthfully the first story I am writing on my own... Please give me tips and all to help with my writing!
She sat in her seat and watched him from the corner of her eye. She couldn't believe it! It was him! She thought about him all last night and yesterday and she thought she wouldn't seen him again until she got to school. She turned toward him and decided to try and talk to him. "Hi. I'm Kitty. You must be new." She watched him as she introduced herself. "Hi. I am new. I'm Damon. Nice to meet you I guess Kitty." He extended his hand which was in white gloves. They looked old. They were off white and looked like it was silk. She shook his hand and noticed how it felt cold. She figured that was the silk glove but she wasn't sure. She did t get a chance to ask because the bell rang and she had to pay attention for class. She wanted to ask Demon more about himself. She wanted to really get to know him. She felt like someone was watching her and she looked from the corner of her eye and saw Damon watching and she bent her head over and hid her face behind her long, silky black hair. Why was he watching her? Could he want to talk to her. Why does his eyes look darker than they did yesterday? She wanted to ask him bit as the period flew by she kept herself quiet and copied down notes. She wanted to follow him to his next class to ask him things, but she didn't know where his class was. It was so strange having him watch her and she wanted to know why he was. The bell rang and he ran out of the class. Sue walked out in the hall and looked for him while walking to her next class. She had Geometry for second period and she had the class with Kara. She walked into the classroom and sat on her seat next to Kara and saw Kara's smile before she could even say anything. "Hey Kara. Why are you so happy?" "Did you see the new kid this morning? Every girl here is going crazy over him! He drives a Camaro! He looks rich! Did you see him?" Kitty laughed at Kara and thought how she goes crazy over every guy here. She has always been with Eric but she still talks and talks and talks about the other guys here. "Yeah I saw him. His name is Damon. He sits next to me in my English two class. He isn't that hot. I mean he's attractive but I don't think he'd like a girl who still cries about her parents being killed." "You couldn't help your parents getting killed Kitty! That wasn't your fault! How did they get killed again? I don't think you told me." "I didn't tell you and I'm not going to tell you Kara. I want to forget about it. I think I'm going to talk to Damon at Lunch and try and get to know him." Kitty didn't really plan to. She just want to get Kara off her back about her parents. Kara doesn't know vampires exist. If she knew she would freak out. Kitty moved to the city to get away from vampires and so far she hasn't seen any. She was happy. As she went through her day, she kept thinking about Damon and wanting to get to know him. She looked for him at lunch and spotted him at a table in the corner alone. Se walked over and looked up at him. "Hey Damon. Can I join you for lunch?" "Sure. I was going to stay here alone but I accept the company." Kitty looked at Damon as he talked and slowly ate her food and thought there was something different about him. She thought he might be a vampire, but that's impossible he is living in the city now. As Kitty watched around here no vampires came here. They stuck to the towns and small places. They liked to be around more of their kind. "So why did you move here? It's not that special here and you look like you are rich. You could have gone somewhere better." "I moved here because I wanted to get away from my family. I was tired of living alone with just them and not being able to go into civilization when i want to. I left so I wouldn't be alone." Kitty watched him and thought about why he left. Why would he want to be in a place like this? It's just a big city that no one even pays attention to you in unless you do something and being rich and living here isn't any different than being rich and living in a little town out away from people. "Well if you need any help I can-" "I won't need it. I already know my way around and I'm only here to finish school and then I'm leaving. I have to find someone and you wouldn't understand. No mindless little human would ever understand." Kitty caught the part about her being a mindless human and froze. He wasn't human? What was he then? Oh please don't be a vampire. "What do you mean by a mindless human? Do you mean you aren't a human?" "Huh? Oh! Um. Yeah I'm human. I guess. If I weren't than what would I be? A vampire or a werewolf? Those don't exist!" Kitty thought about it for a minute and realized what he just said. Werewolves are real too? Oh no. "You don't believe in vampires or werewolves?" "Oh. I believe in them alright. I just say that they don't exist because you should worry about them. That can ruin your life. Never get mixed up with them." "I can't stay away from them anyway. It seems like the memory of them follows me everywhere I go. How can I stay away from them?" "Wait. What do you mean you can't stay away from them? Why can't you stay away from them?" "I can't stay away from vampires. One killed my parents. I came here to get away from them, but they keep coming and I keep hiding and trying to not be near them. I can't stand them. I lost my parents to them and I thought I was in lo-" Kitty caught herself before she said she was in love with one and Damon noticed what she was going to say. "You though you were what?" "Nothing. I don't want to talk about it. Don't bring it up. I want to forget it!" Kitty got up and went running out of the cafeteria and went home early and cried all night. She hoped to not have to talk about what happened when her parents were killed. She just wanted to forget it. She slowly drifted off to sleep and as she got to sleep she dreamt of Damon.
Lol thanks! It's the first story I've wrote to... And I'm still working in it... I'll update sometime tomorrow!!!
She didn't want to get out of bed and go to school, but Kara insisted. She wouldn't stop texting Kitty all morning until she agreed to go to school. When she got to the school she sat in her seat and ignored Damon the entire time. He kept trying to get her to talk to him and she refused and kept coming close to tears. This went on for the rest of the week. She told Kara she would go and stay the weekend with her just so Kara knew she was ok. When she got to her house she knocked and Kara's brother answered the door. "Hey Kitty, Kara is in her room. You can go on up." Kitty looked at him and smiled. He is Kara's older brother and yet he is so handsome. She thought about him and had a crush on him for a while after she first met him. She grew used to him after about a year, but she was still kinda attracted to him. What could she do? "Hey Daniel, I'll go up to her room after I go to the bathroom." Kitty went down the hall and a few minutes later she went upstairs and opened Kara's door and saw Damon sitting on her bed talking to her. She froze and looked at them wide eyed. "Kara, I thought this was just going to be a me and you weekend?" "Huh? Oh yeah! Well I thought we could hang out with Damon too! Isn't it a good idea!" Kara didn't know the reason why Kitty ignores him all this week and she did t want to explain it to Kara. She sat on the bed and hid her face from Damon while they talked. "Hey guys I'll be right back. I have to go tell my brother something. I'll be back in a minute." Kitty looked up shocked as Kara walked out of the room. What was she going to do in a room alone with Damon? She didn't want to talk to him at all! "Kitty, I'm sorry of I offended you on Monday. I don't understand what I said. I just want to know what happened in your life with vampires. Please tell me. I feel really bad that I hurt you and I want to make it up to you. You are a really bright girl and you are very beautiful too. Please don't be mad at me." Kitty looked him in his eyes for the first time since she got to Kara's house and had tears in her eyes. "I really don't want to talk about what happened. I hadn't even told Kara! Why should I tell you!" "You should because I believe I am falling for you Kitty! I care about you!" "You barely know me! How can you love me?" "I don't know! I just do!" He suddenly leaned toward Kitty and kissed her. She was so shocked that she froze. Why is he kissing her? She didn't want to get close to a guy anymore. Not since what happened with Jake. She didn't want that to happen again. She couldn't help herself and she kissed him back. After a few minutes passed Damon stopped kissing Kitty and she got to catch her breath. "What was that for?" "I told you. I think I'm falling for you! I want to help you!" "Why would you want to help a parentless girl like me! You can't get rid of the memories of the vampire that killed my parents! He just turned out to be a big jerk and that why I left!" "Who was he Kitty? Who was the vampire?" "His name is Jake. He was my boyfriend." Kitty started crying and quickly hugged Damon tight and didn't let go. "He told me he was a vampire after we had been together for a year! I thought I was in love with him! He made me feel like it! Then I came home to find my mom dead in the kitchen and-" Kitty saw it all in her mind like it was yesterday. (flashback) "Mom! Mom! Wake up!". She shook her mom trying to wake her up. She got up and looked for her dad. "Dad? Dad? Are you home? Hello?" Kitty hears something in her mom and dad's room so she walks in and sees Jake biting her dad's neck. She stairs at him wide eyed and scared. "Jake! What are you doing? Why did you just kill my parents? I thought you loved me!" Kitty is crying and down on her knees now. Jake walks up to her and drops her dad's lifeless body on the floor. "Kitty, Baby, I do love you. That's why I did this. So we could be together forever. You can't stay with your parents now that they know what I am so I came to talk to them and get them to let u come with me. They refused and forced me to kill them so I an get you. I had to Baby. I love you." He tried to hug Kitty, but she flinched and moved away from him. "Why? Why kill my parents? I loved my mom and dad! I wasn't really to leave them! I told you that I wasn't going to leave with you until I was ready to leave! Why did you not listen to me?" Kitty got up and ran to her room and quickly packed her clothes and belongings and went back to Jake and looked at him with hatred. "I will never forgive you! Don't follow me or go looking for me! I am leaving and I never want to see you again!" Kitty ran out of the house. (present time) Kitty is in Damon's arms crying and holding onto him for deal life till she fell asleep. She awoke in Damon's arms in the guest bedroom the next morning and cuddled up to him and went back to sleep thinking about how Damon didn't try and use her past against her. She smiled in her sleep.
I think it's a good intro, next part u should just let loose because u already covered introductions, or as soon as u finish introductions ten let loose