Øür Šępåråtę Wåÿš Till Death Do Us Part ••••••• I felt the tears flowing from my eyes as I clutched the note, "Dear Kayla, I love u too much to let u see me like this, but I want to see u before I die. Meet me at the old train station at 6:00 p.m. I am going to end my life. Love, Camron" I drove to the old train station, it was about 5:50 p.m. When I got there I saw Camron in the middle of the railroad tracks. As I shouted I could hear the train coming louder and louder. I shouted "Camron! Please don't do this!! I love you so much!!" He looked at me as I shouted more and he smiled a goodbye then I saw a tear fall. I started sobbing, then the train came. Closer and closer, then, it came… •••••••
Er...it could use a bit more detail...maybe a back story..."u" written as "you" would be appreciated...*constructive criticisms, not trolling...you're going to accuse me of it anyway...* overall understandable plot
I think the "u" was written how a normal teenager would write it. If you didn't notice, outside of the letter, everything is spelled correctly. I think he was writing as if he were Camron. Very good story
Øür Šępęråtę Wåÿš The Beginning ••••••• TWO YEARS AGO I woke up today feeling light headed. Last night I went to a crazy party and i think I drank too much. When I went downstairs to eat my parents were gone so it was a good thing. I ate then I brushed my teeth. It was my first day of senior year so I had to dress to impress. When I was done I drove to school. My school has 3 stories, it's carmel brown and white, it isn't the best looking school but it's there. I waved hi to people, then I saw this new face and he was so handsome, he was sitting under a tree writing, his eyes looked so lonely, so I walked over, "Hi" "Oh, hi" "I'm Kayla" "I'm Camron" "You look so lonely, can I sit with you?" "Uhm, sure" "Are you new here?" "Yea, just moved from Jackson Brown" "Cool" There was silence for a while then I left. He was hot but not my type. •••••••