My alarm screaming at me I shut it off with out hesitation and realize today is the day I have been dreading for weeks... A new school. My mom rushes into the room and belts out " time to get up!!" I groan as I get up to brush me hair and get dressed. As I walk down stares to grab my back pack I smell the sweet sugary smell of syrup and quickly go down stair to eat pancakes. As we drive up to the school I see all the kids rushing to there classes and I realize I'm late on my first day of school I rish trying to find room 7b. I finally find it minster later. As I walk into the room my eye catches a very cute guy in the corner staring at me blankly I sit in my sit and every one whisper softly...
Let me just point out some errors. My alarm IS screaming at me SO I shut it off I brush MY hair. Unless you're going pirate. My mom rushes into the room and belts out, "Time to get up!"........ Downstairs is one word. Backpack is one word. Their* rush* minutes* Seat* Everyone is one word. And since you're talking in present tense it would be everyone whispers softly. Otherwise, good story! Can I get a role?