Why the fuck can't you make up your mind? Maybe I'm just wasting my time If that's the case I'm not sorry I hit your face You're just a player In the game of life Lying to my face And stepping on my heart Your not getting my time anymore Just go, please walk out that door I know... It's a shame to the world of poetry
Well if you're not aiming for world-renowned poetry, it's not that bad, just need to fix up the rythum and glow of the whole thing. Also, the four consecutive lines without any sort of pattern could have been changed. A thesaurus is a wonderful tool if you're trying to write a proper poem, as well as using internet pages (ryhmezone) to find words to finish a sentance with. Hope my constructive critisim helps for future poems!