My Cyber Life

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Naviesa, Jan 9, 2013.

  1. Yo PIMDers! Mkay, so, I know I suck at writing and stuff, but I had an idea. I thought it was good. So, I started to write it down! Hope you enjoy it~ Criticism is appreciated! But not too harsh :p *†*†**************************************************
    Hi. My name is Octavia. Octavia Hayes. I know, unique name right? I'm 15 years old, soon turning 16 in February. Not many people have this name. Do you think it feels good to be one of the few people with a certain name? I don't. At school, everyone makes fun of me, calling me octupus, or haystack. Right now, I'm going through a stage of depression. I cut myself, cry, and I've turned into a whole different person. At home, that is. At school, I'm just the quiet weird girl. At home, I'm the full on rage girl. Getting mad at everything, crying at the tiniest things. That's why I've turned to the Cyber World. The world where you can do anything you want. Typically. 2 Years ago, when my depression first started, I was looking on the Google playstore, when I saw a popular app. Party In My Dorm, it was called. It looked interesting, so I installed it. Little did I know, that it would change me deeply, and forever.
     
  2. Sorry guys, Imma make a slight change~
     
  3. Yo PIMDers! Mkay, so, I know I suck at writing and stuff, but I had an idea. I thought it was good. So, I started to write it down! Hope you enjoy it~ Criticism is appreciated! But not too harsh *†*†**************************************************
    Hi. My name is Octavia. Octavia Hayes. I know, unique name right? I'm 15 years old, soon turning 16 in February. Not many people have this name. Do you think it feels good to be one of the few people with a certain name? I don't. At school, everyone makes fun of me, calling me octupus, or haystack. Right now, I'm going through a stage of depression. I cut myself, cry, and I've turned into a whole different person. At home, that is. At school, I'm just the quiet weird girl. At home, I'm the full on rage girl. Getting mad at everything, crying at the tiniest things. That's why I've turned to the Cyber World. The world where you can do anything you want. Typically. I'm going to tell you this story. This story of what changed me. This story of 2 years ago, just to teach you a lesson.


    2 Years ago, when my depression first started, I was looking on the Google playstore, when I saw a popular app. Party In My Dorm, it was called. It looked interesting, so I installed it. Little did I know, that it would change me deeply, and forever.
     
  4. I like, but fix stuff like your paragraph structure, but overall it's pretty good
     
  5. Thank you riri! I will make sure to put your advice to good use!
     
  6. Bump? *sigh* Its going down so fast because of the rps, lol~
     
  7. Hi....Please read??
     
  8. Lol so are my stories, but don't worry when ya update I'll read and comment 
     
  9. It seems really interesting.
    Could you wall me please when you've updated!
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  10. Okay. And thanks riri
     
  11. Good.

    Try to use paragraphs though
     
  12. I dont care what ppl say im telling u this story has lots of pottetion and i think that u should continue please!!!
     
  13. oh and BUMP!!!!!
     
  14. Hiii~ Sorry for not updating....-. Was very very busy
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    WARNING, THIS MAY CONTAIN OFFENSIVE AND 13+ Scenes!!! You've been warned!

    I look at my phone and can't resist anymore. I reach my hand out and grab it off my shelf, instantly unlocking it and going on PIMD. I read my unread messages, and the parties that have happened in my club. I think to myself 'I CAN'T BELIEVE I MISSED THEM', and sigh. I've been becoming obssesed with PIMD lately, all the RPs, mostly dirty ones with sèx scenes and noobs wanting to get hard. My cash seems to be decreasing these days, I swear I'm going to get someone to farm them for me.....and I drift off, on top of the covers of my lavender coloured bed.

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    Mkay guys, I know this was short and it kinda sucked, sorry... :/

    Anyways, thanks for taking your time to read!
     
  15. I love it so far!
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