Scarlett's POV Ugh,I hate my grandparents,well not HATE them but they ask me awkward questions like "So,do you have a boyfriend?" I hate my life,even though everyone thinks its a perfect life,but its acctually it's a NIGHTMARE! Part 2 Now I have a huge headache,I feel like my brain is going to explode into a million pieces with that annoying country song my parents won't turn off! I was frustrated and angry as I lied down onto the hard seat in the car.My parents are maniacs,you know how I found out?When they bought a new car they painted it with polka dots and stripes!Its like a clown car,it even has a fake nose in the front! I couldent take it anymore!I screamed " I HATE MY LIFE!" Then I wish I hadent screamed because just then my dad freaked out and the car.... Find out in the next update!sorry for any misspellings.i was going to put more paragraphs too...
Oh yes hats also a flashback,I will also describe Scarlett after the flashback is over,I'm also sorry for not adding much detail,my fingers are frozen.
I'm sorry, but too many things wrong. Even I saw/could tell there was messed up grammer. I admit, plot MIGHT be interesting, but you've barely given anything to work with. I know, I know, cliff hangers. But to get a cliff you need to build a mountin first. The bigger the mountin the better the cliff. Check organization, details, etc.
You should update not because people like it but because YOU like it since it's a part of you. If a story is an actually story from the heart then it's a part of you. Not here for others but for the fact that you want to express it.... Maybe even that you're not content to just writing it in your notes and staring at it. No one willing to take the time to read it. When it gathers dust doing nothing if you are a real writer then it would pain you. The reason we post stiff here is mainly because it fills something.