This story may not be perfect I coming with this story as I go . *********************************** {FlashBack} "Hi ,I'm Alexandria. Who might you be."I was just being nice like I usually am when I first meet someone "Why do you need to know ?" She glared at me. Right from the start I knew I don't like her at all. I glared back. "What's got your knickers in a twist." Some of my friends are British and I learn from them since I'm always beside them. "Nothing. But since you need to know so much ,my name is Jennia." She walked away as if she won the war , but she didn't. {3 Years Later} "Ali I can't believe it " It was Kristi again for the third time. She just won't stop gossiping. "What's is it now ,It's the 3rd time you called " "Well, the latest news is that ....." I didn't hear the rest I just started zoning out. Usually nothing in her news catches my attention. She was still blabbering when I heard his name ."......Andrew" "Wait what can you say that again ?" I was interested. "Ok fine. Well I heard that Andrew was dating Jennia and from all the gossip around the school I'm starting to think its true ." I was all ears I listened to every word she said. "Ok, bye I got to go ok Kristi" Some people don't see it. He can't see how I blush every time he laughs at my jokes or when I tripped over my feet when he asked me to dance . He don't know these things . This all started when he went on his trip to Europe in tenth grade . He was visiting his Grandma. We used to be the same height when he came back he looked sort of cute and was 4 inches taller . I thought thinking he was cute was a phase but no it continues until know . I think it is kind of wierd to think your best friend got cute over the summer. I stated noticing every detail about him. He had a new girlfriend each week and I set him up with all of them. I noticed the way his blonde hair shines in the moonlight and his icy blue eyes that freezes me when I look into them. Meanwhile, over the years Jennia had become a enemy we competed for everything . I usually win all of them but she does anything to win it never worked on me until know...... ******************************* I came up with this story as I go. Please comment and I will ONLY continue if you guys like it .
Remember to have punctuation at the end of dialogue. For example, "The cookie is gone," she said. (There's a comma at the end, not a period). He replied, "I wanted to eat that! Darn." "Who ate the cookie?" she asked. (The "she" isn't capitalized). Also, I would suggest adding a bit more emotion and detail into it, and adding some suspense to slow it down. Keep writing! It's good for a first attempt.