Hidden

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *leeleecruz (01), Jul 26, 2011.

  1. Hanna Patt slowly lifted her window so she wouldn't wake her parents. When it was opened wide enough, she climbed, more like stumbled, through. "That party was wild!"she thought as she started to undress and take off her makeup. She reached down to get her mothers sleeping pills. "sleep, here I come!" she said wickedly as she took 5. She started to stand when hands came around her neck. "what!?" Hanna exclaimed as she struggled with the hands."night night b*tch." Hanna screamed as she was pushed into the mirror, shattering it, and saw a knife reach it's way to her throat. She started to pray to God when the world went black.
     
  2. Cool , can I be apart of this
     
  3. Sure! I'll make a separate character forum for ya
     
  4. "looks like we got another murder on our hands." Ale said, placing the file on Jordan's desk. "this time it was a wild cheerleader from the school down the street." Jordan pulled back her hair and stared the girl's file. After a short pause, she looked up at Ale. "this isnt good Ale. It's the Sixth murder case this week with the same results! It's at night, it's young men and women, and these victims are always on their own! No witness to work off, just these pictures." Jordan took a breath when Ale smiled. "yeah, people are starting to call it the Hidden Nighttime Phantom" Ale let out a small giggle. Jordan took a big breath." but Ale-" "Jordan, I know what your going to ask. The link is the same."
    "so all these kids are, i mean were, part of the big social or popular group?" Jordan looked wide eyed. Ale nodded." that and they all reported symptoms of cold chills and the feeling of being watched." Jordan stood up and Ale followed suit. "we are going down to the school now." ale nodded and they started to walk to the door."oh wait. Rivers!" Jordan yelled. "yes?" Sami rivers trotted up. " today's your lucky day kid. Your coming with us." "lucky kid" ale smirked. Jordan nodded and got serious."let's go solve a crime for the books, ladies"



    Next chapter: the highschool from a new point of view!
     
  5. Kool
     
  6. "he did what!!!!"Halley shrieked and broke down giggling with her best friend Jenny. "them what happened?" Jenny asked their other bff kaylee, who blushed and shrugged."well then we just started to make out." halley and Jenny looked at each other."that's so lame." Halley said smirking. "guys! He's so cute!I think he could be the one!"kaylee protested. Halley rolled her eyes."you say that about every guy you date." kaylee looked and Jenny for support, who in turn just looked down. Halley looked at kaylee. "you do know I'm just messing with you right? In actually kind of jealous." kaylee's face lit up an she nodded. "I know Halley!" the 3 girls linked arms and started to walk when obnoxious Sally came up to them. "did you guys hear about hanna?!some body came in the middle of the night and killed her! They say it's the same guy who killed Marc, Tony, Manny, Erin, and that other girl. Poor Hanna. Have you guys realiZed that it's only the popular group? Im glad I'm not part of your group even though I wanted to be when we were younger. I'll probably take it over when you guys are gone! Well bye" Sally proceeded to skip off, leaving the girls in a chill. "hanna's dead?" Jenny echoed. Halley shook off the tears coming."I'm sure this is all just a coincidence. No need to worry." kaylee nodded. "yeah. No need to worry." yet neither of the girls budged. Suddenly the intercom buzzed on. "Will Halley, kaylee and Jenny please come to the office?!" the three girls looked up. "let's go guys." Halley said and kaylee nodded. They started to walk off, leaving Jenny focused on the trophy case. A sort of mist formed on it and writing was beginning to appear. It said, 'your next'. Jenny took a step back when she heard Halley."Jenny, come on!" Jenny nodded and yelled " coming!" and took off to the two girls.
     
  7. This is really good!! Misterious
     
  8.  greatt
     
  9.  thanks guys! I really liked writing from Halley and the girls point of view
     
  10. OMG!!! THIS IS JUST LIKE THE STORY I MADE! DETECTIVE DREW EVEN CHECK!!
     
  11. This is awesome!!!
     
  12. Updateeeeeee!!!
     
  13. Hehe. I'm a *****.
     
  14. The three girls piled into the office, looking shaken. Jordan couldn't help but feel sorry for their losses. "please have a seat." the three girls obeyed silently."my name is Jordan and I'm and investigator for this case. These are my assistants Ale and Sami. We just wanna ask you a few questions." my comrades nodded."first question: I was told that you three were close to all the victims, correct?" the three girls nodded."and you have no idea about any of the crimes?" once again the three girls stayed silent And shook their heads. "do you three know who the killer is or anything about the killer at all?" the middle one,Halley, looked me in the eye and said no. The one on her right looked like she might cry. Kaylee I think. She shook her head no.the one on the left seemed to tense up as if she witnessed something terrible. "Jenny? Is there something you'll like to say?" the principal said making his presence known for the first time. Jenny Slowly turned her head to look t everyone and with her voice barely above a whisper, she said"I'm the next to die."