harry is now a full adult wizard an he got transferd to slytherin because hes evil now but anyways hes going on a date to an mcr concert wit hermione an they kiss and make out. so when they are going back to hogwarts they stop at mcdonalds and they cashier pullz out a nife and says "giv me ur mony or else" and he locks them in the storage room until the end of hiz shift. to be continued
ch2 harry and hermione r in the storge room and then the guy comes in and says "bitchez give me ur mony k?" and they give him their money but he still ties them up an then tey try to scream but he covers ther mouts with cloth so dey culdnt be herd. giv me 2 god reviws and ill continue
Try not to use texting/slang in your writing... Maybe that will help. Like instead of "y" spell it out:Why, r=are, frienz=friends, cuz=because.
Soooo... You are calling me a "hater" because I'm trying to help you write a story and give you good critique? I meant no harm I was just attempting to help you out and get viewers and commenters on your story. People don't want to read slang or whatever language you are speaking haha. I'm just saying maybe people will get interested in the story without the slang
People here dont like ti be criquitised. I noticed that too , Blondie. And this has got be the funniest argument ever LOL the way you are talking is funny. Maybe you meant to be funny? And harry potter is my favorite subject, i love it. And in my opinion you ruining it like this is just shocking. You need to have ALOT more details than that buddy. And like blondie said, dont write like you talk.! This had me laughing, you can't argue againsy wisdom; eh?
Oh... And this newb writin is pissin me off! And I guess your just probably a ten yearold just cussing so you can be cool... Stay cool and fix your grammar
I would read the argument but it's confusing... I just wanna kno wen the vampire comes in and I'll b happy
I have no idea what the fuck you just said. And it seems you have bypassed the filter by using slang om the f word. And seriously, go play with your friends. I bet you and them can sell those stories to a pirate.