There is a girl named Ginger who have a twin name Apple. Then, lived a girl named Attrinne that very Jealous of Ginger and Apple beauty. And, when Ginger sleep and Apple buy a Medicine for Sick Ginger,at the town for six days. And, there is a Boy that lost at Forest. Wich a Forest is Apple and Ginger house.knock knock knock knock knock! The boy knock into Ginger and Apple house. "yes?" Ginger stand up and open the door. When Ginger saw the boy Face, She in love. "Oh hi there uh, hahaha" Ginger bit shy. "Hi" "My name is Rudolph" "and you?"" Im Ginger." "I need a place to sleep for five days. Would you accept me to sleep in this beautiful house?" Can somebody continue this to the end of story? I waiting on you )
This is too sequential (first this... Then this.... Then this... And then this) it's like one thing right after another with very little detail. It needs more work. Work on grammar, punctuation and add more sensory details.