I can see you as I walk by, but you just walk into me and walk away, did you feel anything as you walked by or did I just dissappear....am I real anymore, or am I just a non-animate object made animated by people. If I was non-animate, would I be able to feel what I feel from what people say? Or would that just be a program?
Ghost is actually a protocol (program) so i believe you wouldnt be alive but you'd atleast be animated
People get closer, I can't get closer, does anyone notice me when I am around, will people call me what I want to be called, or am I just used like a drill and tossed...am I as useful as a battery....or am I just like a ghost...only called upon when needed...to be noticed...is one dream I cannot simply accomplish, but being noticed shall be one thing I try to do
These still aren't improving. Seriously dude, take the critiques and improve. I'm done being nice. This is just shitty, angsty teen poetry.
you're* And I'm not. Would you like to know what type of school I go to? I go to a performing arts school. I'm in the literary arts department. I take a class on this stuff. I'm not an idiot. Take criticism and apply it to your work or you won't improve.
The word is *inanimate, first of all. Secondly, angsty teen poetry is not a title you want associated with your writing. Lastly, Fox knows what she's talking about. *inanimate*.