First Fan-Fic 

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *_NicoleTheShortie_ (01), Jun 11, 2011.

  1. Ok this is my first my Fan-Fic so tell me what you think of it. It's called Brightly Me.

    Brightly Me --Part One--

    I awoke to see these same white walls. White bed. White clothes. I sighed. My nurse, Helen - a quite woman who had been serving me my food in the St.James Hospital for these last weeks, walked in and placed the red tray of food on the table beside my bed. "The doctor said you have to eat all
    your food today or else",she said. I flinched at the words "or else". I knew what it mean. They would shove that gross paste in my mouth and stick me with needles. It's required, they had told me. It's either eat the food or that. Ever since I had went to Rio and came down with some rare disease, I was stuck in this bloody place. Everyday. All day. I hadn't felt the sun on my skin in so long. The summer breeze that made today look like something I could only dream of. I continued to stare out of the window, that dream while I ate my food, unaware of what I was eating. I knew what I had to do. I was getting out of here. Some way. Some way I would make that dream a reality.
     
  2. THIS. IS. EPIC!!!!

    MOAR MOAR MOAR MOAR

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    YOURE A STAR AT WRITING, NICOLE!! 
     
  3. I love it nic I really do 
     
  4. I want to be in it!!!
     
  5. Awwww thanks guys!  I'll post more . 
     
  6. Yay calum has landed
     
  7. Ok anybody who wants in ..... Umm tell me so I can remember for the next time I write
     
  8. Me be in it please? 
     
  9. Ok I'll put you guys in my next one. Off to write
     
  10. I WANT TO BE YOUR BFFL IN THE STORY!
     
  11. Can I be in it?This is amazing for your first fan fic good job!
     
  12. This is good
     
  13. Thanks .. Working on more
     
  14. --Part Two--

    I sighed and looked away. I would think about this later. I decided to call Rose, my bestest friend since forever. She knew me better than anybody else. I picked up the hospital and dialed the number i knew so well. "Hello?", a familiar voice said. "Rose, its me. Nicole.", I said. "Hey!", she said. "Did then make you eat that crap that look like slushy concrete?"
    I laughed. "I ate food today", I informed her. I heard her gasp and laugh. I smiled. "That's awesome. So do you want to come up or i......",she started. But I interupted her. "Rose..... I gotta get outta here. You gotta help me.", I whispered. Dr.Brown was right outside my door. There was nothing from Rose. I smiled because i knew that meant she was on the way.
     
  15. Do I come in heroically and save Nicole