Eenie,Meenie,Minie,Moe

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *LCL_Mrs-Mouse (01), Jun 1, 2012.

  1. Friend or Foe?

    Epilogue
    I stared at his angelic face.
    His beautiful green eyes scared and daring.
    His button nose red and perfect.
    His full lips pulled back in a scowl.

    A scowl aimed toward me.
    It hurt but made me.... It made me mad.

    I shuffled my feet nervously, moving the gun in my hand.

    I couldn't do it, I couldn't kill the man I loved.

    I pulled the gun back to my head.
    Knowing I would only go to my father.

    I let out a whimper as I felt pain sear thru me.

    And thru all my screams, I muttered my last words.

    "I love you......."

    What do you guys think so far?
     
  2. me likes!!!! Go on!! 
     
  3. Thank you, I will the next update will be like in 15 mins
     
  4. Wait, epilogue?  ain't it supposed to be prologue?
     
  5. Exactly Eli. 
     
  6. Ok guys the theme is set, In La,California. In a Greek mythology/free style, please just give it a try. I will write a key for all of you if you want.
    1 yr. Earlier

    I sucked In a icy breath, as I walked slowly on the beach.

    My feet made a small sloshing sound as I waded in the water.

    I stared at the moon, looking at it wanting to say goodbye.
    I wouldn't see it in a long time.

    I stared at the waves now crashing violently.
    Almost showing me how angry my father was.

    (I will explain later)
    I know the water should of crashed on me bringing me under.

    Chocking me taking all my life till there was none left.

    But I walked thru easily as if slicing thru butter.

    It thrashed at me, grabbing me like a million arms.
    Trying to hurry my slow steady pace.

    Finally I was completely under staring thru the dark waters.

    I felt warmth surge thru me as my tail formed bright and colorful.

    I darted thru the water, thinking carefully.
    What should I say to the council.

    Maybe,Hello and Welcome to all you people who want to kill me. My name is Claire Mairin.

    No that wouldn't work.
    The only crime I did here was swim.

    And my tale had not come out.
    But they wouldn't care what I said.

    My thoughts came to an end as I
    approached the castle.

    Made of thousands of crystal. Shining in the dark waters like millions of stars.

    The guards stared at me with pity.
    Great even the help felt bad for me.

    I swam silently in the large room.
    Thousands of people were here.

    I came up surprised the room was dry.
    That there was air.

    I popped up out of the water, cold overwhelming me as I turned human again.

    There next to my father triton was my grandfather posideon.

    I could see the disappointment in there eyes.

    But beside them was my uncle hades with someone new.

    Someone that caught my eye.
    He was completely gorgeous.

    Brown hair swiping across his face.
    His green eyes, sticking out followed by long eyelashes.
    I stared at his button nose, and full lips.

    And slowly I wanted him. I wanted to know him.

    I could tell by the tired look to his face that he was hades son.

    Only half, he still had an alive look to him. Haha, I self giggled to myself at the joke I made.

    My father stared at me angrily.

    "Claire , I can't even tell you the disappointment I feel in you, one simple task is all I ask. STAY AWAY FROM WATER!! But no you can't do that....."he yelled at me.

    "But father that request is ridiculous,water is a part of me how could I stay away"I yelled back.

    "Don't interrupt me Claire"he scolded as I fell on my knees.

    And after that I blanked out only half listening.

    "Now I will have to send someone to watch you"he yelled.

    I stood up, anger filling me.
    I had fought for 8 yrs. Alone all alone taking care of myself now he thought of sending someone to take care of me.

    "It will be Afriel" I stared at the youth walking toward me.

    He looked at me troubled.
    But I didn't care, all I cared about was his love.

    Already I cared for him.
    As if it was.....……… fate.
     
  7. oops I'm a dumb blonde please forgive me. And is it too long, should I work on shortening it.
     
  8.  it's good. And it's POSEIDON :)
     
  9. Ok guys, here's a key for some of you who don't understand some of it.

    Guide To My Story

    1. Poseidon- he is a sea god(very important)

    2. Triton- he is Poseidon's son(not as important) he is said at a lot of ages but here he is around 35.(Claires dad)

    3.Hades- He's the god of the underworld and the dead.(He's Afriels Dad)

    4.California- is a state in the U.S. With a lot of beaches.

    5.Claire Marian- She is the daughter of Triton, she is half blooded meaning only Half-god. She is 15 and is 5'4 with Light brown hair with natural blonde highlights, big sea blue eyes and big lips. (Fun Fact- Marian means Sea Star)

    6.Afriel- He is Hades and Hebe's son. He is 16 and is Half-God because he did a crime and his punishment is to be vulnerable and have weaknesses like humans do(meaning love to) He has Surfer brown hair, intense green eyes, big lips a button nose. And he is 6'5.(Also another fun fact-look up his name)

    7.Hebe- Goddess of Youth(not important goddess) you'll get why I choose her if you look ups Ariels name.

    8.Here is to explain why Claire is not allowed near water- she is turning 15 and for tritons kids(he 28, all boys except Claire)that is the phasing stage where when near water she is uncontrollable, and when she turns 16 shell stay that age forever.
     
  10. Claire

    I stared at this boy, why did I feel this way towards him.
    He walked up to me his hand outstretched.

    "let's go then"he said smiling a crooked smile at me.

    I took his hand cautiously, it was so cold.
    But then again everything was cold in my human form.

    Even my soul.
    Ever since I was 5.
    Death toughened you like that.

    It taught me not to get attached to fragile people.
    To not get attached period.

    I stared at him and tried to fight the feeling to smile back.

    He was a punishment.
    He wasn't a reward I didn't want him.

    I forced a scowl at him.
    But he just smiled back.

    He put another icy hand on my back guiding me toward the door.

    As we walked thru he let both hands drop.
    He faced me threateningly, his face staring at me intently.

    "listen 'Avatar' I'm not gonna take your crap,Got it"he said stepping closer to me.

    I shoved him back angrily.

    "well listen 'Twilight' screw off won't you, trust me I don't need no Nanny Mc'fee "I spat back.

    Why was he acting this way.
    I had done nothing to him.

    And I had surprised myself attacking him back.
    But that was what you did when you had to fend for yourself so long.

    You learned to fight.
    To defend yourself and only look out for numbero UNO.

    He turned around walking down the crystal hall waving his hand to signal to follow him.

    He stopped and stared at a room and went in.

    I followed him anxiously, there in the room was two suitcases, and two small make up bags.

    Two pairs of shoes were on the bed next to some papers.

    Everything in twos.
    One for me and one for him.
    I stared at the papers and on them was a brochure.

    I ran to it staring.
    Flintridge Prep, woe exclusive.

    I stared at two wallets there.
    This was too much.

    "ok what now"I muttered.

    "now you come with me and were going to a apartment to get set we have school tomorrow"he said pointing toward a portal.

    I grabbed all my stuff and stepped in.
    He stepped in beside me placing his arm gently on my shoulders.
    And before I knew it we were in a huge apartment.
    I dropped everything and plopped on the sofa.
    It was so warm and comforting.

    I stared at him from across the room.
    He stood there awkwardly.

    Moving around setting everything up.

    Finally he looked at me and the couch and sighed.

    "what"I said suddenly feeling so self conscious.

    "nothing I just figure it's introduction time"he said sitting beside me.

    "alright here goes nothing, I'm claire and my last names just a fake I don't really have one I'm pretty sure no half-blood does and I'm 15 and my mom was a human and you know my dad and here I am"I said quickly trying to edge away from him.

    "well that was nice and short, my name is Afriel but just call me Carter that's my Reg name and that's all you need to know"he said getting up.

    "wait I have a question"

    He turned toward me and icily asked"what"

    "that's what,I get it you prob hate this but why hate me before you know me"

    "it's a long story Claire just go to sleep I'll see you in the morning, and wear the uniform cuz were going to school"

    I layed in bed that night just thinking of Him.
    How when he smiled I felt so warm even though he was cold.
    And just slept thinking of him.
     
  11. I know it's really boring guys, that's why I made it so long to get rid of the boring part. I'll make a more jucier one by the end of the night
     
  12. Claire
    I stared at myself in the mirror.
    Looking at my ridiculous uniform.

    It was navy blue and like a sweater vest.
    My hair fell wavy down my shoulders.
    Shining in the light giving off reflections like the sea.

    Like I said before it was a part of me in so many ways.

    I walked out the kitchen and saw him there.
    He looked so handsome I had to gasp.

    He stared at me shocked and ran next to me.

    "what"he yelled looking me up and down.

    "nothing I just remembered something"I lied.

    When we got there is was so huge.
    I was so confused I walked around endlessly.

    I stared around as I bumped into someone.
    How was that even possible.
    I was standing still.
    I laughed to myself.

    I stared at the guy in front of me.
    He had brown eyes with a Haircut like Corey Monteith.
    He was so attractive.

    He smiled coily, jumped back.

    "Holy..., I just saw an angel"he yelled making me blush.

    "nice to meet you to"I giggled.
    I held out my hand"Claire Marian"

    He took my hand and held it to his heart.
    "my name is Grant and may I say your gorgeous"

    I giggle again and heard the bell ring.

    "oh damn, can't you please show me where this class is"he glanced at my schedule quickly and smiled.

    "we have all the same classes together"

    "really are you kidding me"

    "ok we don't but trust me we will"

    He grabbed my hand walking me down the busy halls.

    I stared at all the faces staring at me.
    Some in admiration and some in jealously.

    We finally got in the class and sat down.
    He sat beside me sliding in closely.

    He put his hand on my thigh and whispered in my ear.

    "don't freak out this'll just show guys, that I have dibs"

    I laughed and grabbed his hand moving it.

    The teacher started talking but I wasn't paying attention.
    The whole period I just talked to grant.

    He was slowly putting a charm on me.
    Wrapping me around his pinkie.

    I walked with him everywhere,and when I couldn't he always sent someone with me.

    Always girls who obviously didn't like me.
    I had always been awkward with girls, to much drama.

    By lunch time I was grants 'girl'.
    Not a bad first day at all, I've done pretty good.

    I scanned the lunch hall as grant had his arm around my waist.

    Were was Carter, I caught him coming up to me.
    I kissed grant on the cheek and moved his arm.

    He barely noticed though.
    To busy talking to his groupies and the football team.

    Carter stared at me nervously.
    "your dad will kill me if you get knocked up in the first day of school so please stay pure"he muttered laughing to himself.

    I couldn't help but laugh with him.
    His laugh was so carefree and contagious.

    "your all good I'm not Juno, he just came up to me and I guess I'm his girlfriend now"

    He glanced over at grant who was staring at us intently.

    He seemed to be talking to someone looking over there head.

    It wasn't hard considering Grant was around Carters height.

    Carter suddenly leaned down and laughed out"wanna mess with your Romeo"

    I stared at him amused.
    He was finally coming out.

    He leaned in and hugged me tightly lifting me up.
    I hugged back loving the feel of his arms around me.

    So warm and safe.
    He put me down then staring in my eyes.

    "It worked he's walking over"

    I stared over my shoulder as grant strolled smoothly over to us.

    He hooked his arm around my waist.
    Almost like punching me.

    I could tell Carter noticed cuz he cringed when I did.
    He kissed my neck and glared at Carter.

    "hey I'm Grant and you are"grant held out his hand and Carter took it casually.

    They talked casually, and then Grant looked at me.

    "so baby who's this"he said.

    "his Name is Carter and he's my best friend"

    Carter looked at me smiling obviously laughing in his mind.

    At the end of the day I kissed Grant and went home thinking of him.

    Of how he had enchanted me so quickly and easily.

    In a matter of hours he had me.
    But I didn't care cuz now I had him too.
     
  13. Is it really any good, should I just quit and let it fade away?
     
  14. Is anyone even here? Or care
     
  15. I'm here and I like :"3