ok so i asked a good friend to write me a story about dragons for my brith day, she said she couldent come up with anything so i came up with a beggining to it and she finnished, i will not plagerize what she wrote so ill just post what i wrote, Here we go Let me start this off by saying im not crazy, it communicated with me, some how it talked to me, it started apearing to me at home. The government, They tested me, asked me qeustions tryed to break my will, but im not crazy and they knew, they suggested i be drugged and kept in the aslum but my parents refused.They blinded me with a light, I was supost to forget, but i didint they were unsuccusesful with it but i whent along, you can say i humored them, saying things like "where am i" "who are you" if you dont have a open mind, and if you dont have the time, then i suggest you dont listen to my "tall tail". It all started one mounth ago I know what i saw, sure it was the size of a bird and the sun glared leaving it nothing but a dark shape, but im not crazy..... chapter 1, one mounth ago ~
I like the idea; I think it's promising. There are just a bunch of spelling/grammar/punctuation/capitalization mistakes.
Like the two before me have said it has potential but I do agree that you need to fix all of grammars/spelling mistakes. We're big on that in FF, it's a good plot bunny though
big thanks to cin_cin, but isint every forum helped by her? Part 2 1 month ago It started out like any other day, I was walking home with a few friends, and her...Marie she was beautiful her blue eyes would sparkle in the sun. we had walked passed crazy old man truins house When we all split, I walked the rest of the way home like any other day, by myself. Even know my gaze stayed straight, i knew i was passing the white plastic fence: this route having been etched into my brian sence about the age of 6. I was halfway there as I spotted something move, it was twitching in the greenery of mr. Holloways house, it moved like nothing i had seen. I froze on the spot scared to see what it was, as I inched over quietly I heard a small whimper. I thought it was a large bird, i couldent tell it was shaded by a bush. I stuck my hand out, "Hey, hey, it's okay," my kindness was soon repayed with a sting of pain, "Out you bit me!" A small cry was uttered as I pulled my hand away a baby dragon the size of a teddy bear was biting me.
Still some capitalization mistakes. Only the beginning letter of each sentence, 'i's by themselves, and proper nouns should be capitalized. But otherwise not bad.
Don't say your age on here; you'll get silenced. And besides, grammar, punctuation and spelling are things you learn at a very young age. Anyway, it does have potential, but like Angel said, you need to fix your capitalization errors. The best way to learn is by reading other stories. Read a story here on FF by one of the people who commented on this story. You'll see their writing technique .
No, not really, grammar, capitalization etc. Is TAUGHT, at an early age, getting to learn it and use it properly comes with age and experience. But, you're right, he should try and get better grammar... he or she.
Yes, I completely agree with you, Connor. I apologize, Mist. The best way to learn is to learn from others, so please do take my advice on reading other stories .
Yes, seeing the way other writers write might help on your grammar/spelling/capitalization/punctuation mistakes.
Hmm let's see.. Thank you for the helpful comments on Mists story, since I'm kinda helping him I'm posting the next part. Just to give him an idea of how it should look, as well as the lurkers, and readers here. ----- It was clinging on to my hand for dear life and I could hear it growling deeply. I winced moving my other hand to pat its head softly. "Hey now, I–I promise I won't hurt ya," I spoke quietly, trying to cover the pain in my voice I added. "It's gonna be A-okay!" I heard it, the dragon made this soft sweet sound, it sounded like chaaaaaa . I smiled softly as the baby opened it's jaws freeing my hand now covered in blood, it pranced around. chaaaaa, chaaaaa, chaaaaa! a miniature fire ball escaped it mouth as it jumped hovering in the air. "Haha, looks like I've found a new friend!" I said, holding my hand.. I could've lost a finger...no my entire hand. Almost like it knew what I was thinking, the baby hovered over, it's little wings flapping. CHAAAAA! it growled at my bleeding hand. "H–hey?!" I said reaching out when I saw my other hand healing. "Im...impossible," The little dragon smiled hovering around until landing on my head, chaaaaa... it yawned like it was tired. It's so tiny..it..it has no name! I looked up casually, a name... "How about BabyDragon Chaaa...I'll call ya Chaaa for short!" I smiled, "Do ya like that?!" I heard a cheerful chaaaaa . I think Chaaa was happy, and so was I. Ready to go I slowly began standing up when a huge dark shadow had cast over us.
Hmmm thats good but after it bit my ha i would be more like -smashes it on the ground and it releases- man i dont care its magic it can suck it