I stood there looking over the burnt out city. "you done good son!" Carter said smiling, I could murder him right now. Well Its my mission murder him and his family, but I've grown attached to his daughter Sammie Winters where good friends. I can't spend much time with her though her dads got me on all these murders and my brother Tom won't stop asking me how my part of the missions going. Tom has been assigned to get friendly with Carters over daughter, he's having the same problems. Carters always saying "today England, tomorrow the world!" Which is pretty much what where going to do take down England tomorrow you don't want to know how...
Ummm, to be honest, I only have a few gripes (Lily: Oh boy, here it comes ), and that's 1) work on punctuation like commas and such, it gives greater depth to the story, and 2) paragraphs! I see you split it once, but at the sentence that started "Tom was..." you could have, and should have started a new paragraph... Apart from me being my whiny little self, this was pretty good!
Lol nuuuu Kris it's actually: Oh Jebus here it comes! I loved it just like Kris said punctuation. GOOD LUCK FOR TONIGHT Oh and one final thing BUMP!
Well here we go, tonight we will set of the bombs destroying London. I'm frightened. We had a meeting earlier this how it went: Carter: so tonight it happens we bomb London Kris: WAHOO Carter: Quiet kris Kira:the bombs are ready sir Carter: good, good Me: Are you sure it's a good idea sir Carter: I'm certain - he smiled - Justin: we've got the co-ordinates ready we will load up the plane in five hours Carter: great, It will be blast - he laughed - I'm just going to have to grin and bare the screams. Kira and Kris will be flying over London tonight while me, Tom, Justin and Angie drop the bombs. If all goes well London will disappear forever...
The plant took off and the bombs where in place. I looked at Tom, he looked at me "right then get those bombs ready and drop the back!" carter yelled. "the backs open sir" cried kris "Ready" Carter exclaimed The bombs dropped, I pushed the last one in with Tom. The city of London blew up before my eyes, I was on the verge of punching Carter. "Good job, are next target is New York!"
We landed in a new York air port "Right then load on the bombs this will be easier!" I looked at Tom and mouthed "we need to act now." He nodded, I looked at the bomb I had in my hand, there was one thing I could do....
"we have lift off now new York will be gone" I nodded at Tom twice he smiled. The plane hatch opened I grabbed Carter and kicked him in the face he fell back wards, as I did this Tom thrown Angie out of the plane. Justin grabbed his gun and shot at us I kicked his arm he let go of the gun and fell out the hatch. Carter jumped to his feet and smashed my face on the floor, I grabbed my knife and stuck it in his arm, he screamed in pain and grabbed a parachute before jumping out...