*CIEL'S POV* I look at her,hugging her tightly.I let go after a moment to sit in the chair in my office,I pjull her down making her sit in my lap.She smiles and leans into me,as I wrap my arms around her waist tightly."Would you....ever let anything happen to me?"She asks,I get a little shocked by the question.After a moment the shock wears off and I reply."Never.No matter what,I love you to much to let you go.I'll also have Sebastian protect you no matter what."I reply truthfully."No..would YOU protect even if we didn't have Sebastian, I mean yes by the contract he isn't supposed to let anything happen to me.I also need to know that you'd always protect me too."It was true both me and her signed a contract with Sebastian."I will never ever let anything happen to you even without Sebastian. " "Promise?" "I promise." She puts a hand on my shoulder trying to get me away from the grave I've been at for so long."Come...she's gone now you have to forget her."She says sadly that her best friend is gone.I nod and walk away from the grave.Sebastian and her following. 'I broke that promise,so now I'm making a new one....I'm never smiling again without you.'And I will never break that promise. "SUMMER PHANTOMHIVE 1987-2000" I just made random dates
You contradicted yourself... You said he was sitting in a chair in his office, yet later said he was at a grave.
Then make it clear to the reader. You can't just assume that the reader will understand what is going on in your head while writing it. As well, it should have been a bit clearer that the two people talking to Ciel were not the same person.
Yes, but the reader should be able to know that without the author having to tell them. It should show in the story.