There comes a time when one must sacrafice for someone they love. When no matter what you will do anything for them, but i still think to myself. Is it worth it? Is it worth the pain and tears? The blood? Of corse it is I'm keeping my mom alive aren't I?
It's saturday morning. Normal kids would be making plans with their friends to go to the movies or sleep over. But not me. I'm not normal. I'm the complete opposite of normal. When I was 11 my mom was taken. Taken by people who she owed money to. $300,000,000. How she owes them, I'm not sure. They wouldn't tell. Who is "They" you might ask? No not the people who took her, the people who took me. The police. They took me away from my house. The only one I've ever lived in. They said it wasn't a safe place for me anymore, that it never was.
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It was a year ago when I got the first phone call. I was living with my aunt in a house 9 miles down from where my mom and I lived at 5 years before. I was 16. It was a rainy Monday afternoon and I just got home from school when the phone rang. I rushed to pick it up hoping it was my study buddy saying he could still come over even though it was raining, but it wasn't. It was a call that changed my "sorta perfect" life to a horrible one. "Hello?" I said. I could hear breathing. Not heavy but quite steady breathing. Like the person on the other side of the phone was use to giving this kind of information. "If you want to keep your mom alive listen carefully. Starting now you must drop off $1,000 every two days at the address you received in the mail. You must do this until you have repaid the money your mom owes us. If we find that there is no money when there is suppose to be your mom is dead. Do you understand?" I was speechless. I didn't think I could do it, but I made it this far haven't I?
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I should have and update before tomorrow night . I have a busy weekend. But you are welcome to post some ideas and maybe characters , if there decent enough I might throw them in there some how. Thanks for the support .
~Present Day Recap~ If you don't know this already my name Is Monica. My mom was taken by people who she owes money to when I was 11. I just found out their group is called The Benders. Ever since that incident I've lived with my aunt who couldn't give a **** about me. When I was 16 I received a call from The Benders that told me what I had to do to get my mother back. Now I'm 17 and I'm still working off the debt. It's hard but I haven't failed yet. ~Monica I'm seventeen and I dropped out of Highschool after I finished off 11th grade. It's the 20th century and you now how the economy is. There is no way I can get a job that pays enough for me to be able to drop off $1,000 every to days to the address The Benders want me to. So I decided to do things my way. ~7:30pm ; NewYork Street Corner. It's cold and dark out here and I'm wearing a short sluty dress and some heels. This is my part time job, prostitution. Some nights I get only a few people, but other nights it's guy after guy. My record is 10 times a night. I get paid $50 per person, no discounts accepted. If its a good two nights then I have enough for the drop off and I just leave the money there after my night shift . Hey, they never said what time I had to leave it and they don't seem to have a problem with 11:30pm. If I don't have enough money then I hit up the strip club for a few extra bucks. "Hey chica you ready for tonight" a random guy from the street says. This is how I know when my job begins.