Boys and Men

Discussion in 'Off Topic' started by Bruva, Apr 11, 2019.

  1. What separates the boys.../
    From the men.../
    Is how they sin.../
    And treat their women.../

    It's their experience/
    And their decisions/
    Boys don't see it/
    Men have the vision/

    Building verses demolition/
    Is how they compare/
    What fruits they bare/
    Allures a stare or glare/

    Competition is vague/
    Envy becomes a plague/
    Confusion is an illusion/
    Alluding a solution/

    The men get it.../
    The boys don't fit in/
    Love, learn and listen.../
    Pay attention/

    Fact over opinion/
    A woman is like an onion/
    There's layers to their psyche/
    The things that they like/

    Discover deeper another day/
    Don't rush or be impatient/
    Be careful of what to say/
    Their reactions are latent/

    So what's the message/
    Talk less, listen more/
    Comfort and love women/
    When they're unsure/
     
  2. The last verse feels weird to end it at. It feels like there should be another line or verse
     
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  4. He left you unsure about the ending I guess now comes the comfort
     
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  6. Nah I feel pretty sure that the ending is too abrupt
     
  7. I like this
     
  8. Did you write this, it's amazing ?
     
  9. Ending is uncomfortable ?