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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *_Whateva_ (01), Oct 13, 2012.

  1. Yea this is about a kid I know
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    Act that's all I do act. I act all happy but no. I wanna hang myself. Kill myself anyway possible because I hate my life I hate it! I just want to die. Die die die!!!!!!!!!!! I don't deserve to live I don't deserve to I say I need to die I hate my life! Ugh!!!! Kill me now lord!!!!
     
  2. Cj shut it or ur iPod goes up ur ass
     
  3. You're a terrible writer.

    Don't even think about writing about suicide if you don't know about the topic or understand. It's sickening and infuriating. Put Goddamn effort into it before you do bullshit.

    Pathetic.
     
  4. Develop the idea a little more. Use punctuation. All in all though, it's pretty good.
     
  5. I'm sorry but this is awful.I don't mean to be offensive but there's no plot, that is not how a depressed person would act,it's short, barely ant punctuation that's right and it sounds pathetic.