Sorry, this is my first story so I'm sorry If it's not that good! Rose walked into the kitchen where her husband and 7 year old son were enjoying Dinner. She put the hot plate of potatoes that she held In her oven mitten hands. She smiled and sat down, "be careful. The Potatoes are still hot." she warned, smiling . "Thanks dear" her husband, John said and Put a strained smile on his face. "hey Tom, why not later on we go outside And play some baseball?" He say's to the Little boy, who looked up and smiled. "Sure dad. Hey, can you please pass the Pepper?" Tom says and Johns face goes White. "Um, Tom?" Rose says, her lips pursed. The little boy loses his smile, yet stays silent. "Tom, honey, the script says 'can you please Pass the salt'." Rose continues and Pulls out a gun, aiming it at the little boys Head. "Now, go downstairs, reread the script and Tell Lucy to be up here at 6 am tomorrow. The little boy nods his head and quickly rushes over to the cellar door, where he Could here the hushed voices and cries Of the others. "Remember Tom, next time you make A mistake, don't expect me not to pull the trigger.." Rose says and sashays over to the Door, pulling out the lock from her pocket And locking the cellar shut behind the boy. "John dear, why don't you head upstairs And I'll meet you there?" She says and Ruffles her bouncy blonde hair. The man nods his head fast and scurry up The stairs. Rose frowned, she wasn't happy with how This night had gone. She didn't put hard work into making her life perfect, So that 'they' messed it up.
Remember to proofread it, because you have a lot of spelling, grammar, punctuation and capitalization errors. Use LOTS of detail. Otherwise, not a bad start
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