* A Love Story *

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *LilmrzSwaqq (01), May 18, 2012.

  1. As the principal called me over to his office I knew something wasn't right.
    " Mr.Mason you wanted to see me ?
    " Allison, yes please come sit I've heard some rumors going around about you "
    " What is it ?
    " I've heard you haven't been eating much.. Your quite skinny?
    " we'll yeah it's true I don't really like eating.
    " Any reason...why?
    " Uhh.. It's nothing.. Well I have to go my boyfriends in the car waiting.
    After I left the principals office I felt shame inside me their was a reason but why would I tell him?
    *As I walked outside of school their was my boyfriend Matthew we have been only dating for a month and he's been helping me a lot lately with my homework and problems at home.
    " Hey Umm Allison we have to talk.
    " What is it ?
    " I've heard some sad rumors about. You.
    " And..?
    " We'll Allison I just don't want you to think the only reason I'm going out with you is because your skinny. I mean your beautiful in any way, I heard you've been not eating lately just because you want to impress me?
    " Well yeah.. I didn't want to look ugly for you.
    " Allison, your very beautiful just the way you are don't rely on what other people say because they are just jealous I love you and I want to spend the rest of my life with you just don't force yourself to not eat nothing it's not right baby.
    " I'm sorry Matthew, please forgive me..
    " of course i will always forgive you baby,I love you so much. *he kissed my lips*
    * 500 comments for a part two *
    And comment of what you think of the story so far...
     
  2. Too many teen love stories... I vote no. That's my opinion though I guess. Work on detailing and grammar, and sentence structure.
     
  3. Its good but if u wait for 500 comments u might as well stop writting it now
     
  4. Five hundred comments? Are you kidding me? That's 50 pages! No way.
     
  5. I kinda agree with the first comment and I don't as well you need to write more to attract 500 comments but it's still unlikely that's gonna happen