HELLO READERS! Those of you who know me from writing 'Vixen', I'm working on the updates but I thought I would created this story to keep you busy. Dear Miss. Casey Marie, You have been accepted to Xavior School For The Performing Arts. We have read you're application and you sound like an excellent student that had talent, integrity, dignity, leadership, and etc. Well we know how smart you are so please call us at 1-888-234-5634. We would like to know if you accept the offer. Have a great day! Sincerely, Madame Kundere CEO/Director Me? Casey Marie, accepted into the top school of the Country? No way! I just can't believe this is happening. This is my dream school. I got off my bed with the letter and ran down to my mom to show her. And I said, "Mom! Mom! I got in!" My mom was just in shock. I looked at my mom. "Mom, are you okay?" I saw a tear come down my mom's left cheek. I knew something had happened. I went to my mom's side. "Mom, what happened!" I hope you guys like it so far. Bumps if you like it. Criticism but no hatred. Thanks and some feedback please. Enjoy!
Finally Jessica! I cannot seem to find any errors....Finally! A maybe good plot, good grammar, good spelling! Oh Hallelujah, God has answered our calls...
Hi Hun...just to share some correctiveness in the grammar.It should be, in the first part -your application instead of you're(you are) -student that have/has(because talents are in-built and not of a past tensed) For the last part where you describe the mom -My mom was either; in shock(if something had happened prior to you running down) Or; just as shocked(as to why you were running down) Other thanthose few mistakes,it seems to have a good lead way to the story BUMP