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Discussion in 'Off Topic' started by ChocolateThunder, Dec 17, 2017.

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  1. Let's do some more.
    Got them all sore.
    It's a lesson.
    Do not question.

    You are in deep water,
    And I am the black shark.
    Light them up, Christmas tree.
    Copy me, pay a fee.

    Girl, you might need a sweater,
    If you want to rock my chain.
    I'm just living life better,
    So I can never complain.

    Let them say what they want.
    Why do critics have to front?
    Act a fool and watch me stunt.
    I'm just real and I am blunt.

    I cannot look you in your eye.
    It is not because I am shy.
    You know I'm not that type of guy.
    Big Mac, you are just a small fry.

    Last time I think I only did five.
    For all of my ambition, I strive,
    And now I go up a syllable,
    So you know this must be pretty jive.

    Do you comprehend what they do not get?
    They claim that I cannot balance shìt, yo.
    So I went and made this shìt right here though.
    From four to ten syllables so easy.
     
  2. @Kitten (insert sleepy emoji) give me a challenge. Balancing syllables is what amateurs do.
     
  3. Are you rapping or writing a poem? If you're rapping, need to send a link to hear it. Otherwise, good poem.
     
  4. Thank you. This is a poem. I'm balancing syllables in a creative way, while still changing the rhyme scheme since some people prefer the old school way
     
  5. Alright. As stated before, good poem.
     
  6. Damn you
     
  7. O hi
     
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  11. Thank you. I try to make poems/raps that everyone can enjoy
     
  12. @Kitten @TheSeductress Syllables going from 4 to ten with ever other 4 bars. No criticism now?
     
  13. @me when you stop using AABB/ABAB thanks
     
  14. Who do you even listen too? Lmao. Tell me so I can get a good laugh.
     
  15. Boi AABB/ABAB is fine in rap but as a poem it's boring ? I listen to a lot of people, k.
     
  16. I'm trying to get help with my poetry. Don't just be like, "no bueno," help a brotha out. My unofficial editor is sleep
     
  17. You only learn the rules to gain skill and an understanding of when it’s ok... and to be able to explain... why you chose, to break them. It’s ok to demonstrate your understanding of the basic concepts of art, but find a way to morph it back into a less institutionalized form of the art and it will come off a little better. Adhering strictly to lesson concepts WILL stunt your growth in the creative processes. Learn ALL of the rules.... then forget them, and create YOUR art. It doesn’t make sense now, but keep at it, and it will make sense later.
     
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