A GOD IN HIGH-SCHOOL

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by *alicat1995 (01), Jun 1, 2012.

  1. Hey Guys!! Enjoy!! And leave comments and questions and all that jazz!!! Hope its original!:)
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    Grace's POV

    I hate my dad. I HATE HIM!! I know a of teenagers say that but my situation is a little different. You see my dad is a God. No really! He is Zeus, king of the Gods!

    My name is Grace. I am daughter of Zeus and Aphrodite(goddess of luv). This makes me a shoe in for good looks (if I do day so myself). Long fire-engine red hair, the brightest green eyes you have ever seen and mega-millions smile. And I have a tan which is rare among the red-headed!

    As the Goddess of dance and the daughter of the lightening god u could say my dancing is electric..:) Haha puns!

    Anyways back to why I despise my incorrigible father. To become a full fledged God you have to go through some sort of hardship. Some godlings fight a beast, some give us world peace and some go on a quest to find something.

    I would love to do that. But as the daughter of Zeus and as a Princess of the God's I have to do something hard! Something that will change me. Something that will show me my responsibilities. And why humans are crazy!

    I have to go to a mortal High School..

    You see why I hate him now?!

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    Comment and bump!!!!! 
    Hope you like it!
     
  2. It's awesome but a few mistakes r here and there, you CBS fix them like
    (Day should be say nd other small errors you find)
     
  3. *can. Not CBS
     
  4. It's really good.

    If you want critique:

    1. Don't use emoticons in the story. 
    2. I haven't seen any dialogues yet, but if there are, be sure to use paragraphs.

    I may give critique as the story goes on, but in the mean time, it's great and has potential. Good job! 
     
  5. Thanks I have dialogue in the next update
    Just needed to introduce le story
     
  6. So, the character is perfect...?
     
  7. Adam, I know where you're going at this. 
     
  8. No lol she's an imperfect god
    It's not like one of the cheesy omg blal bla bla blond hair perfect stories she not perfect at all
     
  9. Everyone should know where I'm going with it...
     
  10. So, she's half-god, highly attractive, and is destined to be a god...but she's not perfect?
     
  11. Nope it changes ull see there are some twists!:)
     
  12. If you can prove to me she's not perfect, you have my respect..
     
  13. I can do that :)

    Believe me her life will be anything but godly
     
  14. Well my high school rocks
     
  15. I like it...it's too early to say if it's good or not. All advice I could have said has already been given, I'll watch out for this :).
     
  16. Yayay thanks for reading will post new stuff tommorow