Okay this is based on a dream my best friend had and were making it into a short film. Probably. There was always something about that day that bothered me. I'm not sure if it was the future telling me to just stay in bed or if it was some kind of messed up de ja vu but it was definitely something. It all started off with footsteps. It's okay. They were my footsteps. My friend and I were walking her dog down a trail in our village when her phone buzzed. And buzzed. And kept buzzing. They were alerts. From the police. Apparently a man who was in prison escaped. It was one of those people you read about in the newspapers. The people that kill random people just because they want to. Anyway, she continued to scroll down the article, reading it out as she went along "He is commonly referred to as The Artist. This is because he leaves a trail of circles in places he has been." We continued to walk on for a while. Silence had consumed the air. The only sound was mad by our shoes hitting the dusty track and the panting of the Springer Spaniel running ahead of us. That was when we saw it. The circle. Smeared in blood on the wall of an old barn. I tugged my friends arm. We had to take a look. Because where would the blood come from? I balanced myself on a large rock and peered in through the gap in the wall. There he was. On the floor. Dead. It was Peter, a well known man in the village, lying on the concrete floor. One thing lay in the pool of crimson liquid, a brush. I was going to scream. But i didn't want anyone to hear me. the blood wasn't dry, that meant he was close by. Connie, my friend stood behind me in shock. Her Hazel coloured eyes wide as she stared at the body lying on the floor. Until I heard that noise again. But of course this time it was different. Footsteps. Was this okay? I'm not sure because I'm not a writer. It doesn't seem to realistic to me but is was a dream so I don't really care. Please leave constructive criticism. I know I'm not that good so I'd like to know how I can improve my writing.
Ooh, I like it. It's a great story plot and I think you should continue.️ The only thing I'd suggest is to vary your sentence structures; having too many short sentences with no commas, semicolons, etc. can make your writing become choppy. Keep going! It's interesting so far.
I did think my sentences were too shirt when I first wrote the story so thankyou I'll add more variation in the second part.