A NEW STORY

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by VanillaSweet, Jul 6, 2012.

  1. Hello everyone, some may recognize me from some of my stories and some may not.

    But i am thinking of writing a new story, 'Shush', but i need some reviews on if i should write this story or not, so i dont waste time on a story nobody would read.

    A sneak peek;
    'Shush'

    I feel groggy and everything turns blurry except the sharp noise of the gunshot.

    I sit there, hearing the group of people downstairs rush up and i feel the lights turn on.

    I open my eyes to find Derek gone, the gun in my hand and my sister with a hole in her head, the blood had spattered the walls behind her.

    I hear people scream and gasp and someone starts dialing 911.

    I feel tears running down my cheeks as i look away.

    "oh my god Lilah, what have you done?

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    a little sneak peek of the story Shush
    Please tell me if i should really write it!
     
  2. Oohh you should continue
     
  3. I think it has potential, the beginning is really good