Love is a burning thing.. And it makes a fire-y ring. Bound by wild desire. I fell into a ring of fire. I fell into a burning ring of fire, I went down, down, down, as the flames grew higher, and it burns, burns burns. The ring of fire. With a kick I knocked my knife loose from the dead man in front of me. I glared looking down at him in disgust. Next time don't bump me in the hall way you worm. I tucked my knife back in my pocket, the blood still fresh on it. Leaning down to the boy, I pulling his face up to him, I bit my thumb watching a trickle of my blood slide down my hand. Slowly I rubbed my blood onto my lips as if applying lip gloss, and leaned farther planting a bitter kiss on the boy's lips. I waited for a second before pulling away, and watched him as he eyes began to flutter. Now he would be like me, the very first love slave of Satan's daughter. And when I say "love" I mean he'll be my little toy until I'm done with him. I knew father told me to blend into the Hunan world, yet cause as much chaos as possible, before the end of the world, but I needed some help with that of course. The world would end in 24 hours on counting. I look down at my watch, then to the boy crying in pain before me. This was going to be fun. Bump?
Name: Raven Age: 18 Personality: Sarcastic, usually keeps to herself unless somebody provokes her, then she'll cuss somebody out while using her extremely above average vocabulary. Artistic, has a beautiful voice. Paints, and carries a sketchbook everywhere with her. Appearance: Tall, slim, long black hair that reaches her waist, tan skin, grey eyes that turn black when she's emotional. Good/Evil: (Can she be stuck in between and unable to decide? If not, Evil.)
Eliza 17 Personality: Very stubborn, quiet, smart, a bad temper, sarcastic Looks: Black hair with red streaks, right eye is dark blue, left eye is green, Hair covers left eye Acts evil at some moments but is actually good
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