Hey, My names Maria...Im 18. Long luscious brown hair flows down my back and reaches right above my waist line.I have sea blue eyes. My boyfriend Alex says they sparkle in the sun like diamonds. Whenever he says that I blush like crazy. Haha well im 5' 5" so im not that tall. I'm in 12th grade and I'm not the smartest person ever by not the smartest I mean straight C student. I'm in cheerleading. Other than Alex, cheerleading is my life. I have no siblings...my parents are both dead...and I live with Alex. I bet your thinking wow she lives with her boyfriend and yes I do but nothing happens... Hey, I'm Alex. I'm dating Maria. I have dark drown eyes that can make any girl melt. I'm always being told break up with Maria for me but that's not gonna happen cause I love Maria and no one else. I have dark brown hair and yes its a Justin Bieber cut...not the biggest fan of him but he's cool. I'm 18. Maria's always telling me that my smile can light up the world brighter than the sun. She's amazing. I'm 5' 11" so yes I'm alot taller than Maria but it doesn't matter to me. I'm in the 12th grade aswell but me and Maria barely have any classes together but that's okay cause we live together so I see her often. I play basketball. And I have a older brother but he's in college. My parents are usually out of town on some kind of business trip so usually it's just me and Maria hanging out. Feedback please? Thanks means alot
Oooo nice, I like how u show how much you love each other, it's very touching, reminds me of someone. Please update it, I love romance stories, I love to cry as well HINT HINTlove ya and keep going with it
Maria's POV __________________________________ It's a warm summers day. I wake up to Alexs alarm clock blaring in my ears. I think "wow that's loud" I turn the alarm off quickly so it doesn't awake Alex. I look over at him. He's so cute when he sleeps. Messed up hair, scrunched up nose and hands under his head as if he was dreaming. I smile and kiss his cheek "Wake up sleepy head" He doesn't wake up so I decide to go take a shower. I get up being careful not to wake Alex. I walk to the bathroom and get out a towel and wash clothe. I place my wash clothe in the shower and my towel on the toilet for quick access. I slip out of my clothes and turn on my water. Luke warm just the way I liked it. I slowly get in and shut the curtain. I let the water run down my body and then I easily pick up my shampoo and wash and rinse my hair. I next pick up the conditioner and put it in my hair. I pick up my wash clothe and put my soap on it and wash my body. Next I rinse my hair and rinse off. I step out of the shower and dry off. Suddenly a pair of arms are around my waist and someone whispers in my ear "Good Morning Beautiful" The words sent chills down my spine. I turn around and kiss Alex on the lips "Good Morning Baby" Feedback? Thanks
Maria's POV __________________________________ As we kissed I felt sparks, fireworks, my body tingled. I love him. If I lose him what would I ever do? And then I realized I was only wearing a towel. I smile at Alex "As much as I love you baby I need to put clothes on" He laughs. "But baby!" I laugh and push him easily. "Go put some clothes on before I use this to my advantage" he says. I laugh and go to the bedroom an put on my strapless bra, underwear, an a strapless pink dress and some black ballet shoes. As soon as I turn around I see Alex. The love of my life. The one I want to spend the rest of my life with. I smile and walk over to him and hug him "I love you Alex" he turns and kisses the top of my head "I love you so much more Beautiful" I smile and look down at the ground. Alex tucks my bangs behind my ear and lifts my head up carefully. He slowly and easily puts his hands on my cheeks and he brings his lips closer to mine. When he's bout to kiss me he puts his forehead against mine."Your forever mine Maria. I'll never hurt you" He smiles an slowly kisses my lips. Ofcorse I kiss back. I wrap my arms around his neck and he moves his hands to my waist and rests them there. He pulls away. I smile not ever wanting this moment to end. I say in a low tone "Alex your mine no one else's! I'll never share you with anyone" He laughs and pulls me into a hug and I hide my face in his chest "You're warm Baby" All he does is kiss my shoulder. Feedback? Please
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AWWWWWWWWW HE'S LIKE FUCKING EDWARD!!!! Lol I wish I had Edward Cullen, meh.....lol Cameron will do