Chapter One Tall, dark and handsome I sat at the table by the window and got out my MacBook™ Pro. I noticed the other customers staring at me, my pale skin, my black hair. It didn't matter to me. I knew I was different. I started flicking through my photos, and saw the ones of me and Zak. I thought back to when we first met... 21st June, 2009 Today, I met the most wonderful man in the whole world. He was tall, dark and handsome, and, what's more, when I saw him, I knew he was the one for me. I met him at Claire's Coffee house, he ordered a small black coffee, I remembered that part vividly. He didn't touch it, let alone drink it. This was what made me think. Who would waste $1.95 on a coffee that you won't even drink? Who? Well, him. Later on, I cleared his table and gave him the bill. He gave me his number. He then walked out mysteriously, and didn't look back. *** He didn't answer the phone. "Hi, it's Judith, from the coffee house, call me when you get this," I said. I didn't get a reply. Maybe I will tomorrow, I doubt it though, he seems rather mysterious...
Your thread title should be capitalized, except the conjunctions, the story seems kinda cliche and it's a bit short.
Then, you don't have to read it, somebody else does so I will continue to update. But thank you for your feedback!
I don't really see how the story.... I'm confused I don't have the idea of the plot 1. Add more detail, elaborate their feelings. 2. What Gracie said 3. Develop the idea more. Good luck!
How is this a remake of twilight? Lmfao I like it, just add some more details But I wish for you to continue!
Lucky she stopped this thread and made a new one after she got critcism on this its "More than a protector-remake" this one is dead, the remake is like her version of twilight. Thats why i said she should have stuck to this thread and not made a remake of it because this one isnt too much like twilight.