Just friends

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by nati24, Jan 3, 2013.

  1. This is a rp fan fiction so yea
    Hahahaha Abby this was a great slumber party,
    Thanks!
    While all the other girls were sleeping kelly walks in derricks room turn it down!!
    No says Derrick
    Fine I'll have to, says Kelly
    No he grabs her by the waist
    Stop stop stop hellllppp!!
    He kisses her slowly he pulls away Kelly sits down he grabs he chin and makes out Kelly doesn't want to pull way this time he steps away kelly walks up and takes off her........ Find out friday ttylxox
     
  2. I did not understand anything  sorry
     
  3. Umm It is confusing look at other stories and fix mistakes
     
  4. Well that escalated quickly(I just had to say that)

    But serious, you story I very confusing(see that last sentence was very confusing, like your story). I'm not going to lie to you. It's down right horrible with the structure and grammar, lacks a lot of description, has no plot whatsoever, and it's highly unoriginal. Also try to used quotation marks when working with dialogue.

    :T Just saying.