Hey Lovelies! so this is yet another story by me! yes I know the last one died down and I'm sorry but I'll actually keep up with this one, okay? OKAY!!! here we go Alyssa Greene. 16. Junior. Artist. That's pretty much all the words that describe me. I stare down at my blank paper. I don't even understand why teachers make us fill out these 'GET TO KNOW ME' papers every year. It's not like they read them... I sigh and start writing. Before I know it the bell rings and I get to go home. I slowly walk towards the door, handing in my paper on the way out. Filling out all those papers was making my hand cramp up. I ignored the pain and walked home. On my way there I passed by a mirror. I couldn't help but look at myself... I wasn't considered ugly. I had some nice cheekbones, full lips, and my dark brown hair came all the way to my hip. I couldn't help but stare at my eyes. They were bright green, just like my mom. My mother had died in a drunk driving accident. She killed two other people along with her, but I usually tried to forget about that. I shuddered the thought away and noticed that someone was staring at me. I turned around and saw that it was Jesse. THE NEW KID. I immediately froze and started shivering. I didn't know what to do with my hands so I just put them behind me. He came closer and whispered in my ear. "Staring at ourselves, are we?" He said with a smirk. I frowned at him and he walked away. Jesse was hot. No doubt. But he was probably the biggest jerk alive. I could feel my face turning red with anger just thinking about him. I turned on my heels and continued to walk home. Than god I didn't have to live with him! THERE YA GO!!! COMMENT WALL ME AND TELL ME IF YOU WANT ME TO NOTIFY YOU WHEN THE NEXT UPDATE Is!! please tell others if you like it?? and leave any suggestions or ideas?? DJ
Great start! As jennete said, remember to use TONS of details. And replace the smaller words with bigger ones =) Use a thesaurus!