This is just the first part of the intro so forgive the shortness. Like always I am looking for ways to improve my writing so constructive criticism always is welcomed. Hope you enjoy this horror for a change and Enjoy! The night calm and still. Wind whistling through the cells, cast iron bars cold as ice. Lights still burning in solitary bulbs keeping the place from utter darkness while they sleep. Fuzzy camera feed is all the guards have to go on. Unless one takes the risk of venturing down, to them.
Large update to make up for the small one before! More intro! Richie Stamerson was the one who pulled the short straw that night. He was new and did not know what to look out for. He scanned the halls the others watching over the bad picture on the security cams. There was no way to contact him, once down he was off the grid. He passed by cell after cell until he reached the one. The one that held the one thing feared most in this condemned building. It held out its hand. Red nails standing out next to its pale skin. It beckoned Richie to it. Like a fool he came. As it waited its hands clasped the frigid bars to its cell. It's face was concealed in the shadows red lips forming a smirk was all to be seen and the men upstairs could only watch as Richie sealed his fate. He stepped closer and closer until his face brushed the iron. It came forward and grabbed his head then brought it closer to its and pressed its lips to his. Then they parted and a stream of light erupting from his mouth sucking the life force out found its way into its body. Giving it, or her, renewed strength. She stepped back and the door swung open. The tall, pale, willowy figure wearing a long, deep red, sleeveless dress walked out. Short black hair covering one eye. She looked to the camera one last time. And smiled.
Update! Read and enjoy! BEEP! BEEP! BEEP! Jade groaned as her alarm blared. Her hand reached over and slammed down on the large 'snooze' button. She rolled back over to face the empty spot beside her. Jade sighed and crawled out then made her way to her closet, grabbed a uniform and underwear. Once changed Jade quickly ate an egg and toast then left the house. What awaited her was something from a nightmare. The kind of nightmare she was tormented with. People. Just a few but enough to be noticeable. Laying on the streets, on benches, in alleys. Slumped against walls. All men. Red lipstick on their mouthes. Eyes glazed over, dead to the universe, faces in eternal shock. Jade ran, not in fear but in determination. To the prison. Where just that night a young man had died, and started the end. Comments and/or suggestions go ahead!
Sorry kind of short but will try to make the next update longer. Comments and suggestions always welcomed! Fog made it almost impossible to recognize the building but Jade, having worked there for a year already, knew the location by the back of her hand. Her pocket buzzed and started playing the theme for 20th century fox. "Now? Really?", she mumbled as she pulled her white iPhone out of her black trousers, standard issue. "Hello, Jade Lefort speaking." "CODE RED. I REPEAT CODE RED." she moved the phone away from her face to preserve her eardrums. "I get it! Jeez think you could shout any louder? I'll be right there, I'm on the driveway just wait two seconds!" with that she tapped the 'end call' option and slid the phone back in her pocket. "Maybe I shouldn't have wished for more excitement down here. It seems I got more than I asked for!"
Heres an update for you hope this gets more readers but if not whatever I'm still going to write. Enjoy! The door slowly creaked open as Jade pushed on it with all her might. Once through she headed towards the stairs. The creaky, rusted, could-give-way-at-anytime stairs. Each step gave a groan and rust fluttered down. "What's the big 'Code Red' emergency?" Jade asked as she sunk into her cushy, seat. "Prisoner zero has escaped." Dylan answered in a monotone. "WHAT?! How did this happen?! Prisoner zero was supposed to have the most security, we don't even go near her! This is the securest facility in all of the country!" "It was. Until last night. Remember new kid?" Vince responds in his thick Jersey accent that in the one town of Quebec they do not speak French is very out of place. "Um, yeah! Ricardo? Ricky? Richard?" "Richie." he says flatly. "And he's dead. Figured it out yet darlin'?"Jade's expression slowly turned to horror as her mind worked it out. "He, he didn't. No please say he didn't!" Jade pleaded. Her shoulder length blonde hair blowing around her from the fans positioned around the room. "He did." a new voice declared. Another chair spun around to reveal Grace Yettleburg. A hand flew to Jade's lips. "God, does no one get trained around here while I'm gone?!" she exclaimed jumping up from her seat. "No, people are trained. He said he had been. We took his word for it." A French accent slipped into the mix of voices. Castro D'amour spun his chair around to face the rest of the room. "The whole guard crew last night, uh, how you say, ran away like little baby." Grace spoke up, "Security footage captured it all here." They all crowded around the small screen as it glowed with a faint light emitted by the video. They all watched in terror as the life force of little Richie was stolen by a pair of perfect ruby red lips between iron bars. Then keys, the door opening and a final sinister smile that stabbed at their hearts with daggers of ice and dread. They sat in silence for what seemed hours. "When is the team coming to retrieve it?" Jade broke the silence. "They're not. The council put the town in lockdown. We are the team. No one goes in or out. Including prisoner zero. It's now our duty to capture and bring it in." Grace solemnly explained looking at her feet which had suddenly become very interesting. Jade surveyed the room and caught everyone's eyes. Well then, let's bring this beast in. There you have it! Hope it was good and I am always welcome to constructive criticism and comments.
So, sooo sorry for the wait. Anyways update is finally here! Yay!! Enjoy! That night. A lone woman glided through the streets. Her scarlet dress silently waved in the light breeze. She hungrily looks at the crowds of drunk, high and tired people. Her unnaturally light, blue eyes finally settling on a group of three young, muscular, good looking men. Deciding on a tall, tan looking one she directs her charm towards him as she approaches. Deep lips forming a seductive smile she speaks, "Excuse me, I was just wondering if you'd like to, you know, go somewhere?" he turns his head mouth pursed preparing a dismissal when her powers seep in. His eyes turn a black shade then back to green although a faint filigree pattern shines through. As though in a daze, he responds. "Why sure beautiful." She takes his hand and leads him away from his friends, towards an alleyway. A sole street light is bright in the darkness but suddenly is only emitting a faint glow. She brings him into the alley and they stand looking at each other. Her with malicious hunger and him with impenetrable lust. "You are truly, beautiful." he dreamily declares. A smile tugs at her lips. "Darling, I know." "Someone like you must have a beautiful name." he drones. "Yes you are correct. But…" she pouts, "mine is barley used." her face moves closer to his and her hands wrap around his waist. "I am mostly known as prisoner zero." she quickly smiles and before the realization sinks in she dives into a kiss. Not with passion but with intent. She begins to delve deep down, into his soul. Then like breathing in mist she brings it up. The man starts to squirm and attempt to break free but her hold was too strong. Only one had ever escaped her grasp. Her eyes showing her complete pleasure and determination as the man's soul is slowly and painfully stolen away eventually he falls. A empty, hollow, shell. No longer a person and never to be a corpse seeing as he is not really dead. Just empty. The woman leaves, running her tongue along her perfect teeth whilst her lips curl into a slight smirk.
Might be a while for the next update seeing as I have gotten a case of Writers block! If you have any ideas on where I should go next pm or wall me please. Thx!